THINGS I WRITE AND THIS YOU WRITE!

[Resident Skulky]

Seichiro Asahi

this is good, you just have to check your spelling sometimes.

and learn to use proper (or even DECENT) grammar, learn how to construct a simple sentence, create characters, and not info-dump. Among other things.

[anime_emogirl666]

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

[AngelKeeper2k1]

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes I realize that, but I'd like some more effort or even running the damn thing through a spell check before posting it up.

[Resident Skulky]

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yeah, but your opinion sucks.

Seriously, this reads like something I could have stolen from my 5th-grade cousin, Bablefish'd into Korean, then Bablefish'd back into English.

Honestly, I don't even think English is your first language. If it is, you have a serious problem on your hands.

[anime_emogirl666]

dah fuzzinator of dewm!

It looks like a long block of text. If you chop it up when there is a change of dialogue speaker, then it would be easier to read.

i usually do that when i have it written on paper first. and when i think of something good i dont want to forget it. and i want to get some suggestions about what could be changed and things like that!

[Raskothegreat]

anime_emogirl666

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes, but as a writer, don't you want to improve and try to be as perfect as you can? Everyone's trying to tell you what you're doing wrong and you're on listening.

As for the story, it looked like something I would have chugged out when I was five.

-Rasko

[OneXMuerte]

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

So if Angel can have her opinions and everyone else is entitled to an opinion, including you, why can't we, the ones critiquing this piece of writing say our opinions without you being whinny and only want praise?

[anime_emogirl666]

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes I realize that, but I'd like some more effort or even running the damn thing through a spell check before posting it up.

well im sorry and that the last time i will say it!

[Resident Skulky]

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes I realize that, but I'd like some more effort or even running the damn thing through a spell check before posting it up.

well im sorry and that the last time i will say it!

Sorry doesn't make it any less shitty.
Kind of like how turning in an assignment four weeks late and saying "sorry" to the teacher will not fix my grade.

[anime_emogirl666]

OneXMuerte

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

So if Angel can have her opinions and everyone else is entitled to an opinion, including you, why can't we, the ones critiquing this piece of writing say our opinions without you being whinny and only want praise?

because some people are being very rude when saying it!!

[OneXMuerte]

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes I realize that, but I'd like some more effort or even running the damn thing through a spell check before posting it up.

well im sorry and that the last time i will say it!

Stop saying sorry and actually show us that you mean it! Like really, you have time to edit it and make it clear. Refer back to ALL the post(s) please.

[Nine-year Ivy]

That is everyone's defense. 'It was just a thing I typed up randomly...' Please, it is unnecessary. Your story wasn't bad, just rough. You need to work on pacing, spelling, and grammar. Placement of commas especially. Also, in my opinion, you shouldn't have to listen to people who say that your work is horrible yet tell you zilch on how to improve.

[anime_emogirl666]

Surgeonfish

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

Yes I realize that, but I'd like some more effort or even running the damn thing through a spell check before posting it up.

well im sorry and that the last time i will say it!

Sorry doesn't make it any less shitty.
Kind of like how turning in an assignment four weeks late and saying "sorry" to the teacher will not fix my grade.

ya and i have never done that in school.. i finished high school and im now in college

[OneXMuerte]

anime_emogirl666

OneXMuerte

anime_emogirl666

AngelKeeper2k1

anime_emogirl666

im srry if me liking to write and letting people see what i write offends you, or even if you dont like it. and if you not liking it is the case than don bother reading it!! thank you and have a nice day!! talk2hand

Stop being whiny. You posted it up, you should have expected butt-hurt, especially when you don't read the rules of the forum. cheese_whine

It was poorly written, was not spell checked, and was not formatted at all.

And yes, you need all three of these.

Well I'm sorry... Not everything has to be perfect. You have your opinions and I have mine!

So if Angel can have her opinions and everyone else is entitled to an opinion, including you, why can't we, the ones critiquing this piece of writing say our opinions without you being whinny and only want praise?

because some people are being very rude when saying it!!

So you want the praise, no? You cannot limit anyone from their opinion even if they are rude or not. SUCK IT UP!

[ying-yang ninja]

this would be good as a summary of your story, but if this was the actual story...
well you need some practice. If your new at writing, its not that bad, if youv been doing it for a long time... try harder sweatdrop