The Unicorn Guardian (Chapter Four posted! C&C wanted!)

[NamiStar]

Ooh, I think I know what's missing. Shamira has killed or warned too many humans, I felt as though Daniel should've been at least injured a bit before she notices the drawings. After that, the drawings seem to draw her to become softer, I wanted that element to be focused a bit more. Maybe that's why I thought something was missing.

Journal: I don't really care about werewolves. If it was a story about vampires, that would be a different story. I'm not a fan of vampire stories for some reason (not necessarily just because of Twilight).

[SilverRinehart66]

NamiStar

Ooh, I think I know what's missing. Shamira has killed or warned too many humans, I felt as though Daniel should've been at least injured a bit before she notices the drawings. After that, the drawings seem to draw her to become softer, I wanted that element to be focused a bit more. Maybe that's why I thought something was missing.

Journal: I don't really care about werewolves. If it was a story about vampires, that would be a different story. I'm not a fan of vampire stories for some reason (not necessarily just because of Twilight).

Aha! That's a great idea. Why didn't I think of that? mrgreen I'll have to add something that in sometime soon. Thank you very much.

Okay, good. I know what you mean, though. As much as I love vampires, even I'm getting a little irritated by all the stories about them popping up, especially because they're usually rip-offs of Twilight somehow... x___x

Anyways, I wanna try to keep the excess chat to a minimum, so Imma wait until a few other people reply... if anyone does... razz

[Sheluligans]

mind giving me a snapshot?
not sure if it's my taste

[SilverRinehart66]

Sheluligans

mind giving me a snapshot?
not sure if it's my taste

You mean, like a summary or something? razz

[Sheluligans]

SilverRinehart66

Sheluligans

mind giving me a snapshot?
not sure if it's my taste

You mean, like a summary or something? razz

no, that would defeat the purpose of reading it, just kinda what it's about

[SilverRinehart66]

Sheluligans

SilverRinehart66

Sheluligans

mind giving me a snapshot?
not sure if it's my taste

You mean, like a summary or something? razz

no, that would defeat the purpose of reading it, just kinda what it's about

Ah, okay, sorry. It's basically about a former-spirit who was born as a unicorn to protect other unicorn herds from hunters. She can change into a human, too, and pretty much just tries to scare hunters and keeps them away from all the other unicorns. ^_^

[Sheluligans]

I think i shall give it a go, you'll most likely receive critique and comments tomorrow. :]

[SilverRinehart66]

Sheluligans

I think i shall give it a go, you'll most likely receive critique and comments tomorrow. :]

Yay! I look forward to it. mrgreen

[Sheluligans]

SilverRinehart66

Sheluligans

I think i shall give it a go, you'll most likely receive critique and comments tomorrow. :]

Yay! I look forward to it. mrgreen

I'll try to keep the word lolwut out of it (stay serious >x< )
but I'll read it tomorrow and give my opinion. hopefully, i have something actually interesting to say

[SilverRinehart66]

SilverRinehart66

merf...

[Sheluligans]

It's quite the piece.
For once I'm actually interested in something that involves unicorns. Even though the title does kind of give it away partially, this was surprisingly...gruesome?
she is pretty brutal in killing the men, and strangely creative
overall, I could see this turning into a full flown story, i would read it.