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Fredegund

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Post: 81611639_1 created on Thu, 09 Aug 2012 19:25:38 +0000
Posted: Thu, 09 Aug 2012 19:25:38 +0000

Never mind. biggrin

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Post: 81611639_2 created on Tue, 14 Aug 2012 05:52:23 +0000
Posted: Tue, 14 Aug 2012 05:52:23 +0000

It's hard to judge a prologue like this without knowing the direction it's gonna go, or without reading more. Decent writing though. The writer of the note seems stilted sometimes, and the wording is weird in places (like "their ancestor’s wretched cultivation of grievances done" ).

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Post: 81611639_3 created on Sat, 18 Aug 2012 19:37:55 +0000
Posted: Sat, 18 Aug 2012 19:37:55 +0000

The Magic Minute

It's hard to judge a prologue like this without knowing the direction it's gonna go, or without reading more. Decent writing though. The writer of the note seems stilted sometimes, and the wording is weird in places (like "their ancestor’s wretched cultivation of grievances done" ).

Thanks for the thoughts.

I'll work on the wording.

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Post: 81611639_4 created on Thu, 23 Aug 2012 05:46:33 +0000
Posted: Thu, 23 Aug 2012 05:46:33 +0000

Bump.

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Post: 81611639_5 created on Mon, 27 Aug 2012 20:33:27 +0000
Posted: Mon, 27 Aug 2012 20:33:27 +0000

Bump.

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