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- Posted: Thu, 30 Jun 2011 05:51:36 +0000
Moondoggy69
First, I would just really like to tell you i think your amazing. Someone who has the initiative to actually start writing a story and keep up with it is wonderful. Countless times over the past few years i'v had plenty of 'great ideas' to write about and never started. I really cheer you on for starting. I am being completely honest when i say the only reason I EVER get on my Gaia account is to see if you have updated this thread. Unfortunately, I am about to be very honest with you.
The newest chapter section was terrible. It didn't feel like anything you have written previously. I know i don't write much and that i'v never started my own story but i do know one thing. You have to write for yourself. I feel like all this is was you spurting words out at the audience to keep them happy. In this section i lost all the passion and love i felt in the other sections.
Like i said though. I really do enjoy your writings. I just don't feel like this is your writing.
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The newest chapter section was terrible. It didn't feel like anything you have written previously. I know i don't write much and that i'v never started my own story but i do know one thing. You have to write for yourself. I feel like all this is was you spurting words out at the audience to keep them happy. In this section i lost all the passion and love i felt in the other sections.
Like i said though. I really do enjoy your writings. I just don't feel like this is your writing.
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I have to say I agree with this. This update was not nearly as captivating as your other chapters. Whether that is due to you rushing it to placate us, a change in writing style after your long hiatus, or the lingering influence of being in China (my writing suffered so much when I was in Korea...) I don't know. It's probably a combination of all of the above.
There are elements in this chapter I like. I can understand why you want to show the interactions with people who aren't Sam. I like what you are trying to do. I just don't feel that it's quite there. I hope you take it as a compliment when I say "I believe you can do much better."