Epic Story Of Randomness

[ghostrider51]

Shafweh

Everyone who will give you a good review will tell you the same thing. You want to waste your time? Go ahead. I'm not stopping you. I'm just telling you how to format your work to get readers.

I know
People I know have told me that
but like i said
If your not gonna read it
Why are you still here?
Let my work be and go cretique elsewhere

[Ciarlare]

And you shouldn't let put a lot of lines of song lyrics there. It distracts, and it makes me think that you're trying to make it longer by doing that.

EDIT: So basically you're rejecting the concrit you're getting. Psh. At least we're trying to help you.

[ghostrider51]

Candyde

And you shouldn't let put a lot of lines of song lyrics there. It distracts, and it makes me think that you're trying to make it longer by doing that.

That would be my bad
I was trying to edit some of the line spacing so it could be shorter
It didnt let me redoit her on gaia for some reason
It all kept bunching up together

[ghostrider51]

Candyde

And you shouldn't let put a lot of lines of song lyrics there. It distracts, and it makes me think that you're trying to make it longer by doing that.

EDIT: So basically you're rejecting the concrit you're getting. Psh. At least we're trying to help you.

So im the only seeing all the edits to the first few posts?

[Shafweh]

Some edits, not all the edits, mate. There are a lot more paragraphs hidden in that mess.

[ghostrider51]

Shafweh

Some edits, not all the edits, mate. There are a lot more paragraphs hidden in that mess.

I know I know
Ima work on it some more next weekend when i have the computer
its 1 in the morning over here and i had a rougth day
not gonna look through my huge asss story now