Drowned by Bees
this whole story looks like it was written by someone who was high on crystal meth
HOLY CRAP SO THERE WAS THESE CATS AND THEY WERE RUNNING BUT NOW THEY'RE FOXES AND OLD GREY TOM APPEARS AND SAYS SOME s**t AND THEN IS NEVER MENTIONED AGAIN BUT ******** THIS OTHER GUY COMES OUT AND ******** TRANSFORMS INTO A BLACK TOM AND WHO HAS YELLOW EYES AGAIN?
i'm not trying to be rude but you have literally no cohesion whatsoever and that's coming from someone who enjoys reading stupid things
extrapolate more on what you have and make it more of an actual story and less of brain diarhhea
Who enjoys reading stupid things, and whose rare use of punctuation is often incorrect. Considering that the author is in middle school, writing a rough draft, and probably busy with other stuff, it's a really good story. Oh, by the way, I like trying other peoples writing styles. Here's an example:
so this comment looks like it was written by some guy who doesn't know what a period is
and who apparently did not read the story he's insulting well enough to even notice that the old grey cat and the shapeshifter have the same name and stuff
maybe the person who wrote the comment should have read through it better before posting