Bunly
(?)Community Member
- Posted: Mon, 02 Apr 2012 04:21:07 +0000
Hello, I'm a new writer and I was thinking about making this into a mini series. I want your honest opinion on my work please!
( The tektek is the character )
Cold.Painfully cold throughout my fingers.Nothing around me seems sane any more.The gun gripped in my right and a soaked blade in my left.Those are the only things I trust now.This moment.This exact time,place,and taste reminds me of her.Just the very sight of my breath's vapours remind me of her.No time for that!. I slide my finger against his body till I touch his trigger. Stepping back into the room with the guns ringing in my ear. This feeling of sanity for once and the excitement finally makes a reason for a purpose.I swing my weight across the room holding him out and aiming for the suits. I sweep across the hallway to my right and release a wall of lead.Reload, Don't forget. The magazine falls out fast enough for me to slap a new one in and run to the window.Too Many of them. I punch a clean hole through the window while letting her slice through a suit's arm. It was a two story apartment but it was high enough to cause a concussion if I'm not careful.Jump!. I take a deep breath and release my grip on the window's sill.Peaceful.Like an Ecstasy throughout my body.
( The tektek is the character )
Cold.Painfully cold throughout my fingers.Nothing around me seems sane any more.The gun gripped in my right and a soaked blade in my left.Those are the only things I trust now.This moment.This exact time,place,and taste reminds me of her.Just the very sight of my breath's vapours remind me of her.No time for that!. I slide my finger against his body till I touch his trigger. Stepping back into the room with the guns ringing in my ear. This feeling of sanity for once and the excitement finally makes a reason for a purpose.I swing my weight across the room holding him out and aiming for the suits. I sweep across the hallway to my right and release a wall of lead.Reload, Don't forget. The magazine falls out fast enough for me to slap a new one in and run to the window.Too Many of them. I punch a clean hole through the window while letting her slice through a suit's arm. It was a two story apartment but it was high enough to cause a concussion if I'm not careful.Jump!. I take a deep breath and release my grip on the window's sill.Peaceful.Like an Ecstasy throughout my body.