yup another teen angst poem...need a name!!

[starcrossed17]

Wrapped in emotions
unable to get out
Suffocating devotions
Too weak to shout

Fake the smile
Hide behind the lies
Bury in denial
Shift away the eyes

Not worth the time
Not worth the tears
Its my time to shine
Show no fears

Take a stand
I am through
Wipe my hands
Get over you

Easy to say
Not easy to do
For with new each day
I fall more in love with you.

[Lixnia]

starcrossed17

Wrapped in emotions
unable to get out
Suffocating devotions
Too weak to shout

Fake the smile
Hide behind the lies
Bury in denial
Shift away the eyes

Not worth the time
Not worth the tears
Its my time to shine
Show no fears

Take a stand
I am through
Wipe my hands
Get over you

Easy to say
Not easy to do
For with new each day
I fall more in love with you.

Um... Shifted Love, maybe? Lol, usually, I'm pretty good with titles, but this one was really hard for some reason... Awesome poem, though.

[Velma Touched My Tralala]

...Easier Said Than Done? Idk..

I like your poem, but.. It seems almost too simple. Something's missing..

[Gothickun]

Nope...I got nothing.

[starcrossed17]

i like shifted love...and yah its supposed to be simple...the idea is that its so simple to see but so hard to fix. i didnt wanna clutter it with metaphors and imagery i wanted it to be raw emotions! thanx for everything

[Saria_Ish_Adams]

Dude, u just said a good name for it...Raw Emotions...

[starcrossed17]

wow didnt even think of that. THANKS! do u like the poem by the way?

[Dran_Whisp]

Wrapped in emotions
unable to get out
Suffocating devotions
Too weak to shout

Fake the smile
Hide behind the lies
Bury in denial
Shift away the eyes

Not worth the time
Not worth the tears
Its my time to shine
Show no fears

Take a stand
I am through
Wipe my hands
Get over you

Easy to say
Not easy to do
For with new each day
I fall more in love with you.

Hmmm... how about Covered Life or Consumed Being

[Dran_Whisp]

Ohh!! and great poem by the way

[starcrossed17]

wow you people are really good....*confuzzled*...any critiques on the poem?

[easytreepimpress]

"on to a new day","broken",or"still in love".........thats all i got biggrin

[starcrossed17]

thanx easy...got any critiques?

[liltinksta]

awesome poem.. i liked that it was simple idk what the title could be but everybody gave ya good suggestions.. good job though..

[starcrossed17]

thanku kindly liltinksta! goodness i love it when ppl like my work xd

[fallenpetals]

Holy crud! I like that poem. It is very clear but a little too simple. But that was great!