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Post: 4684729_1 created on Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:39:21 +0000
Posted: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:39:21 +0000

I see the sadness reflecting in your eyes.
The mask you wear by day never completly covering the pain.
I cry out in the night,
Wanting to help you.
But yet i can't.
Your pain blocks all outsiders.
Just open up and let me in...

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Post: 4684729_2 created on Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:43:07 +0000
Posted: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:43:07 +0000

How come no one ever replys to my posts!!!! crying

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Post: 4684729_3 created on Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:49:11 +0000
Posted: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:49:11 +0000

It's great! Reminds me of several people I've known. You've got talent, Vicious.

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Post: 4684729_4 created on Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:52:47 +0000
Posted: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 22:52:47 +0000

Its good, you should add more to some of the lines like the first one. What are the eyes like? What do they show? Are they dark cold eyes? Or bright sky blue ones?

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Post: 4684729_5 created on Wed, 24 Nov 2004 23:16:24 +0000
Posted: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 23:16:24 +0000

hmm. i really like it. It resembles one that i've done. It's in my journal if you would like to see it... please comment! (if you read my journal...)
anyone is welcome to read my journal. so please do!!!

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