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I'm sick on today
The same old thing as yesterday
Revulsion and pale skin
Stagnant water
To which they push me in
I shudder... I shake
I try not to wake
But the alarm clock smacks me up side the head
Twirling 'round and 'round to no end
So, is this our doom, my friend?

The coffee in my over used cup shivers
Ripples like circles and today's routine
I can't get this out of my mired mind
We're so precise, marching, a machine

Ugh, I think it's killing me

The water drips from the rusting faucet
Like seconds of our lives down the drain
It's hypnotizing and captively horrifying
But it dulls out this pulsating pain

Fill up your glass with chlorine again
Then chug down prosac as if it were life
The irony in it all as you smile and say,
"Hell, it's better than the knife."

I can't help but feel soporific
This algetic world dancing to apathetic beats
Where we swim in puddles of piss
And lay to sleep in morphine-drenched sheets

The little children play in circles
And I hear their laughter every day
Wind whips willows on over blown rock
Trying to wisp what can't be taken away
THAT KICKED SO MUCH a**! I love it!

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very good! i bow to the rare ability to express suididal themes without resorting to angst. xd awsome!
I like it. Well written, and a trite subject put into georgous, unique words. definately a great peice.
dragonyoko
very good! i bow to the rare ability to express suididal themes without resorting to angst. xd awsome!

suicidal themes... hmmm.... How'd you come up with that?
PrincessOrion
I like it. Well written, and a trite subject put into georgous, unique words. definately a great peice.

thank you, I'm glad people actually like it.
((*pins it back up to the top*))
not bad. I'm jealous. You write very well.
O.O...that...was...great!!!! can i be more jealous!!
That was just simply incredible work -staples at the top- STAY!!! Im definately recommending this poem to others
that was very good... I liked it very much! The rhyme was good... and everything was good!!!

-GlassRose2000
Oh, thanks everyone. I'm glad you all like it so much. And I thought this was just gunna be over looked... well... any way... I was just wondering why you all like it?
For me it’s very expressive and depictive....
Nanake
For me it’s very expressive and depictive....

oh, alright, thank you again 3nodding
I like the fifth stanza/section/thing the most. Your use of words is better than most. Overall, I like it.

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