The Hands that Birthed you.

[GumDropGirlie]

CW- BUT please be nice..please dont be insensitive..and if that isnt possible..just dont respond...please ..i repeat, be nice.

They've told stories..of heroic escapes..
The young hero with binded hands...who somehow got free
He returned home , to the arms of his loving family
"Oh we've missed you so much".
Stories theyve told, of the young maiden...
who was trapped in a castle, and soon saved by the prince
the thorns became flowers
the rain became dew.

But.
where..do you go..when the hands that bind you, are the ones that birthed you
when the seed that planted you...strikes and mocks you
When your mouth is sewn shut, because of what is love.is pain as well

Do you grow up and become a flower
Do you turn of age and shine like dew upon grass
Do nightmares disappear and become sunlit mornings
Does God suddenly appear, and say "Ive missed you".

No.
thorns bite me
lips rip me
love has hardened into an iron shell
and my breath has given up into a sigh
Escape, where?
is the fate of my death
hell....
punishment...

and love.

~O.r

[Jassadi]

I LOVE THIS!
You are an amazing writer!
Everything you stated is true.
Sadly

[kioshi_imako]

Such deep emotion and confusion both love and fear they can be related by anyone. Often those that bind us do not mean to harm but to protect and do not know when to let go.

[GumDropGirlie]

ty everyone for the comments. Its sad some could relate

[Squeeky Momo]

GumDropGirlie

CW- BUT please be nice..please dont be insensitive..and if that isnt possible..just dont respond...please ..i repeat, be nice.

They've told stories..of heroic escapes..
The young hero with binded hands...who somehow got free
He returned home , to the arms of his loving family
"Oh we've missed you so much".
Stories theyve told, of the young maiden...
who was trapped in a castle, and soon saved by the prince
the thorns became flowers
the rain became dew.

But.
where..do you go..when the hands that bind you, are the ones that birthed you
when the seed that planted you...strikes and mocks you
When your mouth is sewn shut, because of what is love.is pain as well

Do you grow up and become a flower
Do you turn of age and shine like dew upon grass
Do nightmares disappear and become sunlit mornings
Does God suddenly appear, and say "Ive missed you".

No.
thorns bite me
lips rip me
love has hardened into an iron shell
and my breath has given up into a sigh
Escape, where?
is the fate of my death
hell....
punishment...

and love.

~O.r

Ah, so much imagery heart .. It really is beautiful! ^-^
Work on it a little more, though. I'm pretty sure a little re-visioning will definitely make it bloom!

[GumDropGirlie]

Thank u so much! smile I will try to work on it a bit more smile Always room for improvement!

[Squeeky Momo]

GumDropGirlie

Thank u so much! smile I will try to work on it a bit more smile Always room for improvement!

You're welcome! ^-^
Try submitting it to contests you find online.
I found some really good competitions whereas
when some one wins, they get a free trip to Turkey.
My teacher has suggested many contests in the past
that I've only won a few silver keys for.
If you want any more information, just ask!
I won't mind bugging my teacher about you.
I absolutely love writing with all my heart! heart

[GumDropGirlie]

Squeeky Momo

GumDropGirlie

Thank u so much! smile I will try to work on it a bit more smile Always room for improvement!

You're welcome! ^-^
Try submitting it to contests you find online.
I found some really good competitions whereas
when some one wins, they get a free trip to Turkey.
My teacher has suggested many contests in the past
that I've only won a few silver keys for.
If you want any more information, just ask!
I won't mind bugging my teacher about you.
I absolutely love writing with all my heart! heart

I would appreciate that very much! smile If u could tell me of some, I think itwouldbe fun to submit some of my writing. smile

[brutile]

I like the poem.

[GumDropGirlie]

brutile

I like the poem.

thank u!

[xNeonDancer]

heart

[NightstormKitty]

Sad but I can kind of relate. My parents don't hold me down or anything but... love is pain, that's for sure. I just posted a poem called Just Say One Word. Not my best work but I'm tired.

[Luna_Uncia]

It's a wonderful poem with a terrible theme.
But it's still good, and entirely relatable.
I hope you keep up the good work n_n

[Maiden of the Stars]

Oh my
I absolutely adore this poem :]
It makes you wonder what happens to those who are oppressed by the very people who brought you into the world. The term 'birthed' itself could be taken a different way as well - it's connotative. You can take it and see it as someone being reborn and that the person who made you who you are, is the same one who is taking you apart.
Very nice :]

[GumDropGirlie]

Maiden of the Stars

Oh my
I absolutely adore this poem :]
It makes you wonder what happens to those who are oppressed by the very people who brought you into the world. The term 'birthed' itself could be taken a different way as well - it's connotative. You can take it and see it as someone being reborn and that the person who made you who you are, is the same one who is taking you apart.
Very nice :]

Interesting take! I like that smile