Take me away

[Kitsune-chi]

Shh, don't speak
It'll hurt less day by day
As I'm taken away
As I'm lost in the sands of time

Though there's nothing I can do
I watch for a sign
That my life is my own
That my past is truly behind me

I cough up blood
The walls laugh with contempt
I get stronger
The eyes of my childhood are dissapointed

Did you want me to fail all along?
Striving for nothing
Looking for everything
I realize this was your goal

Understanding and knowledge
Are set apart
You didn't even know me
Let alone understand me

For who
And what
I am
And what I will be


All right. Criticism, praise, I don't care. Just say something about it.

[[Cheshire Cat]]

I love it. But there's no rhyme scheme that I could see. sad BUT...that doesn't matter in poetry. So...good poem. 3nodding

[Shadow_Spark]

I like. It's a very nice, dark poem.

[Shadow_Spark]

Deaths_Follower

I love it. But there's no rhyme scheme that I could see. sad BUT...that doesn't matter in poetry. So...good poem. 3nodding

The way I see it not rhyming shouldn't be seen as a disappointment. rhyming is just a detail, the thoughts and emotions shown in the poem are what really matter the most.

[[Cheshire Cat]]

Shadow_Spark

Deaths_Follower

I love it. But there's no rhyme scheme that I could see. sad BUT...that doesn't matter in poetry. So...good poem. 3nodding

The way I see it not rhyming shouldn't be seen as a disappointment. rhyming is just a detail, the thoughts and emotions shown in the poem are what really matter the most.

...I know...I did say that it didn't matter.

[Kitsune-chi]

Thank you all very much. =3

[Shadow_Spark]

Welcome.