rate my poem

[Fzero]

My only wish was that you would come home this lonely night, a wish thas was to remembered. Oh how I waited for thee, for mere words could not describe hte pain in my longing heart. Yet, it was not the pain in soul that tourtured me, but the lonliness that I had endured was suffering greater than any phyisical ailment ever done to me. A night that would have surely extinguished my burnung desire to talk before a picture of perfection. But this idea was to be dissmissed the moment I was you once more, fore the agony in my heaty subsided, and a new feeling came over me, a feeling of new life that was never to be forgotten. So let us remember this precious moment. For our time to bid each other farwell nears; thus with a trickle of tears we exchange our last loving kiss. wink

[T_T crying_me T_T]

its pretty good... i like it, but watch for spelling before you post, and the wording needs work in a few places. i'd like to read some more of your work.

[MrsMica]

It's not that bad for prose. If you fixed the technical errors, that is.

But it's not poetry. There IS a thing called prose poetry, but very few people understand it and even fewer can write it. Very short prose is called something else.