PL's Peak: Guide to Poetry and Critique (feedback/discuss!)

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I'm here for the poetry guide!	45.1%	[ 594 ]
I'm here for the critiquing guide!	18.8%	[ 248 ]
I'm here because someone else pointed me here.	6.1%	[ 80 ]
I'm here for the gold. Didn't it say it had a poll?	30.0%	[ 396 ]
Total Votes:			[ 1318 ]

[ponpon_ako]

stupid poems..cant fix this home!!

[omgChe]

cKbroken

stupid poems..cant fix this home!!

but a good home could fix your poem

[ponpon_ako]

nullChe

cKbroken

stupid poems..cant fix this home!!

but a good home could fix your poem

lol..ur kidding..i read it everyday!!

[dark angel lilly]

do u like my peom let me know u can pm me


I hide behind trees, not because im scared but because of u
U once told me u'd be there for me
But when i needed u
u where gone
and so i hide
Just in case u come back
Because i know now
You dont have my back
If i stay behind my tree
U can't hurt me
I can breath my own world
I can paint a masterpiece
Of imagination
I was different
But u said u didn't care
But when it came time to show
U never did
So now i know u dont have my back
I was wrong
But some how
I couln't care less
Because now i rule
In my world
Where people care
and don't swear
I have changed
Yes that is true
But u come back
Only to laugh
But thats ok
Thats alright
Because i'm the one
Who has it all right
I may not be as cool as u
I may not rule the school
But what does that matter
For i am myself
And for myself
I do just fine
I show my true colors
Unlike u
But now i know u don't have my back
I've learned something today
And now i have something to say
Be careful in who u trust
But don't be sad when u lose who ever u must
Because thats what happens
Because life goes on
Because some day in the end
Cool wont matter
Trends will die
If u are true to ur self
When all struggle to be the same
When all those things dont matter
Ur'll be glad
Because change can be scary
And soon it will all change
But 1 thing that will stay the same
Is u
So when people
Call u different
Don't let their words hurt u
Because they shouldn't effect u
And stay strong
And in the end u will be happy
U will live high
For they who have struggled just to be the same
Will realize for once
All u ener beauty
So thats all i have to say
But never let it fray
Because one day ur'll
realize that what i have 2 say is important
So
Be yourself for those that mind don't matter
And matter don't mind

[FREAKTARDflaminpopsicle]

just a poem that i wrote, feedback and tips please?
thanks(:

I’m alone, but I’m not lonely
I’m strange, but I’m unique
I’m thrown to the side, but I don’t like the attention anyway
I’m here, but I’m not listening
I don’t like you, but I don’t hate you
I wanna leave, but not for good
I have flaws, but I never said I was perfect
I’m not afraid of falling in love, but I am afraid of the sudden stop at the end
I’m truthful, but I’ll lie to keep someone safe
I smile, but it’s a 50/50 chance if it’s real
I’m judged, hated, and loved
I cry a lot, but I swear its allergies
I’ve been beaten down, but I just get back up
People laugh at me, go ahead, I love seeing someone laugh, especially if I’m the reason
People tell me I’m quiet, but that doesn’t mean I don’t have a lot to say
I’m open minded, but I do judge
I make mistakes, and each one I’m sorry for.

[HatelessHeart]

What do you think of my emo sounding poem?
sweatdrop

i look through a frosted glass and think of you
why did you leave me here
what did i do

i look to find you standing there
you are free
free with out me
and truly; truly free

i look through the frosted glass and think of you
why did you leave me
what did i do

i know only what happened
with me
not you

but why wold you leave me
what did i do

[Hoodimann]

"sounding"?

wink

Good luck with future versions. Peace.

[omgChe]

The Doors - Orange County Sweet
Go!

It explains why I am so blank inside.

[Brannyh]

woah woah could you maybe sum that up in like three words??? thanks smile sweatdrop

[Brannyh]

Brannyh

woah woah could you maybe sum that up in like three words??? thanks smile sweatdrop

I was taking about the beginning stuff

[omgChe]

Hrmmm, in three words; let's try.



"Poetry has rules."



That work?

[purpleflower127]

FREAKTARDflaminpopsicle

just a poem that i wrote, feedback and tips please?
thanks(:

I’m alone, but I’m not lonely
I’m strange, but I’m unique
I’m thrown to the side, but I don’t like the attention anyway
I’m here, but I’m not listening
I don’t like you, but I don’t hate you
I wanna leave, but not for good
I have flaws, but I never said I was perfect
I’m not afraid of falling in love, but I am afraid of the sudden stop at the end
I’m truthful, but I’ll lie to keep someone safe
I smile, but it’s a 50/50 chance if it’s real
I’m judged, hated, and loved
I cry a lot, but I swear its allergies
I’ve been beaten down, but I just get back up
People laugh at me, go ahead, I love seeing someone laugh, especially if I’m the reason
People tell me I’m quiet, but that doesn’t mean I don’t have a lot to say
I’m open minded, but I do judge
I make mistakes, and each one I’m sorry for.

3nodding heart




~ That is a beautiful poem i know i can relate to it pretty well you have great talent keep writing.~ heart 3nodding

[omgChe]

Thanks for stopping by our wonderful forum. You will find many poems to comment on in threads other than this beloved sticky.

[purpleflower127]

Could you guys tell me a really good place where my poetry will be recognized without being copied or stolen any sites or any threads on gaia plz i want to go somewhere with this writng passion. heart

[AlambiqueCiel]

purpleflower127

Could you guys tell me a really good place where my poetry will be recognized without being copied or stolen any sites or any threads on gaia plz i want to go somewhere with this writng passion. heart

Umm...hello? Why else would people come here?