PL's Peak: Guide to Poetry and Critique (feedback/discuss!)

Why are you here?

I'm here for the poetry guide!	45.1%	[ 594 ]
I'm here for the critiquing guide!	18.8%	[ 248 ]
I'm here because someone else pointed me here.	6.1%	[ 80 ]
I'm here for the gold. Didn't it say it had a poll?	30.0%	[ 396 ]
Total Votes:			[ 1318 ]

[Fuh Cube Itch]

zero the last decepticon

Fuh Cube Itch

zero the last decepticon

In all honesty, I could really give a rat's a**. I mean, this place is like the greatest punk-rock collection of people ever assembled. There's a lot of great talk, but there's nothing being done about it. Hell, that's why the farthest the punk-movement ever made it, was the ******** bar. When it's time for revolution around here, let me know. I'll join the cause, but the politicking over it just isn't my forte.

He said, politicking.

For someone who hates talk so much,

you sure do most of it.

I like conversation, yes.

I'm not out to save this forum, though.
So think what you'd like about me. It's really of no consequence.


You may run along, now.

he said, consequently.

[Probably Zero]

Fuh Cube Itch

zero the last decepticon

Fuh Cube Itch

zero the last decepticon

In all honesty, I could really give a rat's a**. I mean, this place is like the greatest punk-rock collection of people ever assembled. There's a lot of great talk, but there's nothing being done about it. Hell, that's why the farthest the punk-movement ever made it, was the ******** bar. When it's time for revolution around here, let me know. I'll join the cause, but the politicking over it just isn't my forte.

He said, politicking.

For someone who hates talk so much,

you sure do most of it.

I like conversation, yes.

I'm not out to save this forum, though.
So think what you'd like about me. It's really of no consequence.


You may run along, now.

he said, consequently.

3nodding

[TheXGreat XBelow]

It's always darkest...

I guess I'll write something.. off the top of my head:

Clutching at my holster gun,
stare into the blinding sun.
When has all this begun?
Where was I, and what have you
done?


I don't know.
I'm just venting.

...before the dawn.

[yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah]

cheese_whine

[XxConxX]

im actually more of a song writer how is this ???

I sat in front of you with
Heart open and all you did
Was yell at me you didn’t
You couldn’t care less
If I was dead and left you
All alone

You cant see what I really wanted
It was you (and only you)
You had your chance you blew it
I had mine and I blew it (a perfect chance)

Your broken promise was as good as a lie
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
My broken heart was only mourning
What it thought it wanted only made it cry
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
Tears fall because you don’t want pain
Wearing you down

I sat in front of you when
You deceived me
Told me you loved me
Then ran away even when I
Looked I couldn’t find you
Just your body atypical heart

You cant see what I really wanted
It was you (and only you)
You had your chance you blew it
I had mine and I blew it (a perfect chance)

Your broken promise was as good as a lie
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
My broken heart was only mourning
What it thought it wanted only made it cry
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
Tears fall because you don’t want pain
Wearing you down

I sat in front of you with
Eyes closed tight
To what I did
Left you behind
That was before I knew
I was going to need you
Before I knew love
Was so hard to find
And memories were
So hard to lose

You cant see what I really wanted
It was you (and only you)
You had your chance you blew it
I had mine and I blew it (a perfect chance)


Your broken promise was as good as a lie
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
My broken heart was only mourning
What it thought it wanted only made it cry
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
Tears fall because you don’t want pain
Wearing you down



Your broken promise was as good as a lie
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
My broken heart was only mourning
What it thought it wanted only made it cry
I wanna know is the pain gone yet
Tears fall because you don’t want pain
Wearing you down

[omgChe]

DO NOT POST POETRY IN THE STICKIES.
I will poop on you. You will smell.