metafixation
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- Posted: Sun, 29 Jun 2014 06:25:51 +0000
this has gone through one major overhaul. it's a prose-poem and so while i'm going to keep it with standard linebreaks here, it adds a different sort of twist in paragraph form.
the narrative is very intertwined with my own mythos related to my other powertry so if that part goes over your head it's fine, i'm just worried about the imagery and "cohesive theme".
thanks in advance.
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tide me over
thorns rip at gowned up girls
who n** on my sherry shoulders,
looking for a way to be borne
upon this boulder
that i’m holding gently while murmuring
an evening Mass to dissuade doubt.
“this is where
we give the years to her”.
i set us down within a circle of
burnt fountain grass and kneel,
peeling skin crosses from the point
of loss.
but the woman stray bare, their beauty
never lacking against the sun. pulled-off slips
lay scattered as rotten pathrays of wry thread
settling near sacred streams.
women of great age spoke to them
in asphodels.
the girls rasp ashy yells
from the well dug below
shot-out mouths, and feral suns gasp
novae without notice.
i did not foresee the withering
of olives left
uneaten, forgotten memorials
plied as plates once i returned home.
biting apart stone fruit hearts that used
to roll down bellies, i cement them with
my sloughed off skin.
we must rise; grab your dates
and dance
life spirals up wards
to protect against
rival fates.
i pour five mulled streams
from torn up fingers onto
the sharp tongues of the earth
and she swallows me down
in commune
we speak
of the tower that will rise
for the sun. we have become drunk
on ourselves, “my blood is
binding us together, letting us rain on
tin roofs.
my eyes may be
missing but
i can still work the seas.”
the earth smiles at me and
loses a tooth.
she places it in my palm, the color of
beaches and calm and asks:
“will you finish?”
i spit on her
lost wisdom, gum it down,
and press it against the faucet for
when the sun may
finally ask to sleep.
"i’ll take a leap,"
i say,
“once the day decides to end
its way, the waves aren’t
mine to keep.”
she smiles, the last of her
teeth bright blue,
but i wave off
her "sure!" and drown in
the ocean in hopes the sunlight
might see and go
dark with me.
the narrative is very intertwined with my own mythos related to my other powertry so if that part goes over your head it's fine, i'm just worried about the imagery and "cohesive theme".
thanks in advance.
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tide me over
thorns rip at gowned up girls
who n** on my sherry shoulders,
looking for a way to be borne
upon this boulder
that i’m holding gently while murmuring
an evening Mass to dissuade doubt.
“this is where
we give the years to her”.
i set us down within a circle of
burnt fountain grass and kneel,
peeling skin crosses from the point
of loss.
but the woman stray bare, their beauty
never lacking against the sun. pulled-off slips
lay scattered as rotten pathrays of wry thread
settling near sacred streams.
women of great age spoke to them
in asphodels.
the girls rasp ashy yells
from the well dug below
shot-out mouths, and feral suns gasp
novae without notice.
i did not foresee the withering
of olives left
uneaten, forgotten memorials
plied as plates once i returned home.
biting apart stone fruit hearts that used
to roll down bellies, i cement them with
my sloughed off skin.
we must rise; grab your dates
and dance
life spirals up wards
to protect against
rival fates.
i pour five mulled streams
from torn up fingers onto
the sharp tongues of the earth
and she swallows me down
in commune
we speak
of the tower that will rise
for the sun. we have become drunk
on ourselves, “my blood is
binding us together, letting us rain on
tin roofs.
my eyes may be
missing but
i can still work the seas.”
the earth smiles at me and
loses a tooth.
she places it in my palm, the color of
beaches and calm and asks:
“will you finish?”
i spit on her
lost wisdom, gum it down,
and press it against the faucet for
when the sun may
finally ask to sleep.
"i’ll take a leap,"
i say,
“once the day decides to end
its way, the waves aren’t
mine to keep.”
she smiles, the last of her
teeth bright blue,
but i wave off
her "sure!" and drown in
the ocean in hopes the sunlight
might see and go
dark with me.