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Post: 4724564_1 created on Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:01:05 +0000
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Post: 4724564_2 created on Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:02:54 +0000
Posted: Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:02:54 +0000

wow verry nice sweatdrop

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Post: 4724564_3 created on Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:04:35 +0000
Posted: Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:04:35 +0000

It was very good. I think it is fine the way it is, but.......... it seems like it is missing something. I dunno if that helps.

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Post: 4724564_4 created on Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:04:36 +0000
Posted: Fri, 26 Nov 2004 21:04:36 +0000

I like the description, but #1 I think there's too many thy's, and #2, what you're descrbing isn't that clear to me. Are you describing a man drowning????

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