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Roses are red, just like your cheeks.
Days fly by and fade into weeks.
Weeks change to months, which turn into years.
Losing you is my worst fear.
But, pretty soon we'll have been together
For a measurement of time that feels like forever.
However it will never be enough time spent
On the radiant goddess who was Heaven-sent.
In case you didn't catch that, I was referring to you.
Did I forget to mention that violets are blue?
They remind me of your eyes, which share the ocean's hue.
Did I ever tell you that you are the one?
And, oh, that gorgeous smile shining brighter than the sun…
So, please, be my light and lead me through the dark,
To the gates of Heaven in your arms.
Sometimes I feel like you're a perfect dream,
If so, make sure I stay asleep.
The flow is good for the most part, it's a bit broken in some area's, but nothing a few commas or extra syllables can't fix.

I think it's a good poem, good job :}
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The flow is good for the most part, it's a bit broken in some area's, but nothing a few commas or extra syllables can't fix.

I think it's a good poem, good job :}
This poem is AWESOME....o3o You're a very good poet. <3
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