"I've Been Crying for at Least Three Days Now" comment plz

[hewhoshotdownthestars]

Someone please kiss me,
Press your lips to mine
in an attempt to remove this poison
Purge me of my sins

'Cause nothing feels right
nothing feels good anymore

STOP BEING SO GODDAMN AFFECTIONATE
your underdeveloped
under age
womb can't handle or understand my love

I can't feel her touch me anymore
the places where her finger tips reach to grasp
are going numb
maybe she is trying to hard to please
maybe I'm shutting down
trying to anticipate the up coming storm
where I WILL DROWN

It's come to sink ot swim
and I just don't have the energy to fight
even his crying crib does nothing for my resolve
then again lately it's been looking more and more like a...
[grave]

I've been crying for at least three days now

[Fizzlesticks]

hewhoshotdownthestars

your underdeveloped
under age
womb can't handle or understand my love

Seriously?

[hewhoshotdownthestars]

Fizzlesticks

hewhoshotdownthestars

your underdeveloped
under age
womb can't handle or understand my love

Seriously?

It's not like I was dating a 16yr old I was with someone who was very immature. it's about my son, who was taken away from me, before birth, and me being in a bad situation, and just not having the energy or motivation, in fact, being motivated to stay in the bad situation despite the negative effects on my son

[Fizzlesticks]

hewhoshotdownthestars

Fizzlesticks

hewhoshotdownthestars

your underdeveloped
under age
womb can't handle or understand my love

Seriously?

It's not like I was dating a 16yr old I was with someone who was very immature. it's about my son, who was taken away from me, before birth, and me being in a bad situation, and just not having the energy or motivation, in fact, being motivated to stay in the bad situation despite the negative effects on my son

That's nice, but if you want it to be poetry you're really going to have to work on improving those images.