Faded Words

[_kumiko-chan92_]

Critiques welcomed, please smile

Bare out your soul for the world to see
Let it all out, be finally free.
Yet seem to lock it up,
For these pleas fall on deaf ears,
The hopes and the dreams,
The wants and the fears.
I tell you so simply,
Yet you seem to never listen.
So here I am, I will try again,
There's nothing to lose,
Though nothing to gain.
To mold one's self to the wants of others,
Is to live in this world only slightly sane.
To live your life by certain expectations,
Leaves little room for your own reflections.
So take what you expect from me,
And toss it aside.
For I'm only on Earth for a limited time.
These are the words from the one never heard,
So listen up now,
Before they are gone for good.

[kitsunefandom]

I am having a little trouble following the meter. In the beginning it seems to have a sense of iambic pentameter, then at the end it seems more kinda like a limerick. What did you want the reader to feel?

[_kumiko-chan92_]

First thank you for reading and giving thoughts. biggrin and I was trying to go for kind of a feeling where no matter how many times you tell someone something they won't listen. Almost like a defeated feeling. As for the meter, yes that is an errent flaw of mine. I tend to focus more on the words than the formatting. Any ideas on how I can improve?