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Envy reigns like a dictator
Stealing vulnerable souls
Turning them against eachother
Until hate is all we know
It shoots down other emotions
Captivates young hearts
Turns this world into a trainwreck
Laugh as it falls apart.
Envy is in your eyes
Even when you smile
It takes over your entire body
Leaving you in denial
It consumes all your dreams
Changes what you believe
Envy is the destroyer of love
The destroyer of everything

It's a good personification of one of the world's most common sins.
Good job, all and all.
I think in the third to last line the word "changes" could be made into a stronger verb. Overall, though it was beautiful.

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