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I Feel.

Feeling the carpet melt
into a hardened lump of fibre,
I thought about ripping out a chunk
of my hair to add.
This voice, so spastic and not,
is bouncing into the phone
and echoing in your ears.

I didn't think that I had even opened my mouth
and you opened my mind,
instead.

Even green marble eyes
look at the world differently
when their owner is flipped sideways.

Instead of exhale, all I can do is
inhale and hope or
pray
that there's still some breath left inside.
This carbon monoxide
keeps filling me up instead of
your words about soap and ring-ting-ting-ting
electrical vibrations and just
who
that composer is.

Trace an outline on the wall
of skeleton dreams and wants, I
don't think
about you or me or even
us. If I could, I would but you see,
the carpet keeps melting and hardening and
I'm stuck in the fibres.
Intertwined in a mass of threads,
opening my mouth to breathe or scream
but instead
I smile.

I smile and the ceiling splits open,
an empty vaccuum exploding the gas
that has buried its way inside my brain.

You pause
in the middle of a thought that once belonged to me
or maybe it always belonged to you
but you paused,
inhaling the car fumes and hoping
(praying)
I don't light a match.

- Seanna
wow that was powerful! i have no critisim and let me tell u that is so rare!! wow i wish there was a way i could save that to refer to later i love it!
You pause
in the middle of a thought that once belonged to me
or maybe it always belonged to you


absolutely awesome line there.

~~Vinn
::drools:: You really know how to end a poem right.
Thank you all for your comments. heart
Anything that's wrong? Do the line breaks distract? Are they irritating? Too breaky? Not breaky enough?

Obvious? Horrible? Dare I say, angsty?
Too Good For Words... But i know my favorite word is eternity , so how about, that poem is like my favorite word, eternal.

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