Cyanide
I am the insoluble
crystallized rock
the experiment she abandoned
and left to rot.
She chose me
when fate was the skeleton bumbling past
alright, 1. this line is heart but 2. right about here in this sentence is where i get a confused on the images because your next line reads funny without some kind of punctuation there. because it reads "when fate was the skeleton bumbling past a hood covered its ancient head" and that just reads funny to me.
a hood covered its ancient head
concerned about the density of love
behind this coward's back.
The product of an affair with addiction exploded
"product" says that something came from the affair and the addiction, but you don't exactly say what that product is, only what it does. i wanna know what it is that's doing these things. unless i fail and i'm just not reading far enough into the lines. in that case, ignore me. i only got up like an hour ago, anyways. ><
in our hands, and has since, passed--
took my limbs, left my mind limping
heart
through allies in the junkyard as a grey moon sets;
paying my debts to the mouths of
dumpsters that overflow
with long nights under naked flame, testing--
offerings of flesh for the burning.
The same smell encapsulates it all as I recall
the odour of sweat and cylinders: here, behold
stagnant sessions of sex and solvents
antidotes inspired by hell, and thereafter
to spite me.
Her spirit lives on, settled on the plains, the destruction
where bitter seeds fermented and gave birth
to these scattered thoughts stuck in troughs;
her almond-shaped eyes
crawling, infested
back into bed with my dreams
without me
"with my dreams without me" reads funny, too. it's the "with" too close together. although i kind of think the "without me" could be gathered. but at the same time, it may not be. because it could leave the reader thinking you both got back into bed. so idunno.. you may not need it at all, but on the other hand, it might be necessary. i guess if you took it off it would depend on your reader. if they follow the story well enough, they'll gather the without me should be there, but if they didn't follow the story well enough, they might think it would read "with me" but the "without me" reads funny with the with in the line before regardless.