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[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

eternity until your return

Why was it shy to begin with
when it couldn't find a way to hide,
i knew it was growing inside
like a plant that needed no sunlight
only the ecstasy of your being...

blossoming into a heavenly delight
that extended past the outskirts of heaven,
divine in its own way-but determined to find a way
to explain what it meant
all it could say was I love you...

not sure if that was enough
in time it would feel more pure,
than any crystal lake,
yet more immortal than any wooden stake through the heart,
it would start to form a part of me...

that wants to be with you every waking moment,
even asleep,
in my dreams I could not break a tear,
knowing you were here,
my only fear is your leaving...

knowing I would be enslaved by your vanishing,
i would be wishing on every star,
for an eternity until your return.

[AlambiqueCiel]

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

Really? Really. You're gonna be an idiot in front of all these people. Frist, you hardly make any sense with your chatspeak and second, I know the basics of poetry. Obviously you do not.

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

fyi poetrys rules are the poets who set them if you didnt know that then you dont know nothing how dare you call my poem crap its a well conveyed poem and surely your not at my level of literature to judge anything poetry has meaning and emotion or what ever form the poet gives it maybe your just insecure about your work thats why you say bad stuff about others cause you know there words will be more appealing and just more pleasent than to read your own, if you bring negative all you will get in return is negative i dont know if i shall feel bad for you or just do as others and not care,

[AlambiqueCiel]

XDemonic-DeviDomX

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

fyi poetrys rules are the poets who set them if you didnt know that then you dont know nothing how dare you call my poem crap its a well conveyed poem and surely your not at my level of literature to judge anything poetry has meaning and emotion or what ever form the poet gives it maybe your just insecure about your work thats why you say bad stuff about others cause you know there words will be more appealing and just more pleasent than to read your own, if you bring negative all you will get in return is negative i dont know if i shall feel bad for you or just do as others and not care,

rofl rofl rofl rofl rofl
Poetry does have rules and until you know that you can't be a good poet. You may be able to bend some of the rules but they will always be there. Poetry is not just about emotions it's about using sensory language to convey something, that's why poetry is really big on imagery. Until you know all this, don't judge my work. Anyways, I bet one hundred percent you didn't even look at mine.

And I can tell you the reasons why your "poems" suck.

[Adimurti]

i am about to do something so amazing...

...............................
troll: you've been reported. please stop posting/embarrassing yourself.
...............................

...you'll shit in your own eyes with glee!

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

Really? Really. You're gonna be an idiot in front of all these people. Frist, you hardly make any sense with your chatspeak and second, I know the basics of poe
try. Obviously you do not.

you take to long to think of a response your so ingnorant it makes me laugh and apparently the rules evolved for example shakesphere a great poet he evolved all previous rules and made his own style he questioned why do i have to write with these rules, another example who ever said we had to write int patterns and rhyme than came free verse do you understand or do i have to be your literature teacher newbie XP

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

XDemonic-DeviDomX

we have become infants

as soon as I got out of the dark there was a light
but frightened by this light I closed my eyes,
remained and maintained close to her for I did not know
what I was or were I was ,I cried
then I tried and tried until I felt more floor
then walked further more to know more,

I finally came to realize the illuminating light,
for above my head it lied but for my eyes
all around was clear but for later above did not know
despite that I always smiled back with delight and pride
for nature was outside my door
and I could simply adore

but soon I came to know of enlightenment
and was stuck inside to question
and only to give an answer,
for I did not know of a saint
only of a Satan,who lurked outside
for I shall stay inside knowing I would be safe

knowing my ailment
I did not bother asking a question
for I knew an answer
for if there was a saint
I shall pray as others do,inside
knowing if I do as others I would be safe

but how can I move without movement?
if in one spot I not question?
for I knew one answer?
do I accept and not further give a complaint
for I shall follow one direction of a ride
am I not safe knowing I'm more still than I was infant?

p.s if you know your literature time line than you can figure out this poem other than that its a fun read do enjoy

No,poetry isn't just emotions. Yes, poetry has rules. Learn please.

Also get your crappy "poem" outta my thread.

what would you know about poewtry if you dont understand the basics of poetry your just as the rest of hyprocits in this world before you judege me do you know yourself when you do come back other than that you will never be a poet if you do not appreciate the basics do us all a favor and dont call your self a poet -smh-

fyi poetrys rules are the poets who set them if you didnt know that then you dont know nothing how dare you call my poem crap its a well conveyed poem and surely your not at my level of literature to judge anything poetry has meaning and emotion or what ever form the poet gives it maybe your just insecure about your work thats why you say bad stuff about others cause you know there words will be more appealing and just more pleasent than to read your own, if you bring negative all you will get in return is negative i dont know if i shall feel bad for you or just do as others and not care,

rofl rofl rofl rofl rofl
Poetry does have rules and until you know that you can't be a good poet. You may be able to bend some of the rules but they will always be there. Poetry is not just about emotions it's about using sensory language to convey something, that's why poetry is really big on imagery. Until you know all this, don't judge my work. Anyways, I bet one hundred percent you didn't even look at mine.

And I can tell you the reasons why your "poems" suck.

you even said it your self you can bend poetrys rules dummy haha why further argue with you your like a theory what happens when you corner an animal in a corner and keep scarring it all it does is attack back thats what you are afraid to accpept your mistake you attack back which is sad testing your mind on poor little minds and kids all you are is a bully that knows big words cause your afraid to accept the simplicity of things you pity me hehe and by the way my poetry is really rated high by some brilliant minds and proffesors i know i make mistakes and its human of me your being like a math equation who says you can only solve it one way hmm what happens if that way doesnt work out yeah your just left to guess so pathetic i love your spunk i must say that XP

[AlambiqueCiel]

You are probably the most annoying, ignorant troll/noob I've met on here. I really don't give a s**t what you think about poetry or my poems. You know nothing and I know that so give up.

Have fun being reported.

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

AlambiqueCiel

You are probably the most annoying, ignorant troll/noob I've met on here. I really don't give a s**t what you think about poetry or my poems. You know nothing and I know that so give up.

Have fun being reported.

haha mhmm so you make a forum to report other people this is just a poor excuse of giving up its kinda funny

[AlambiqueCiel]

surprised

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

You are probably the most annoying, ignorant troll/noob I've met on here. I really don't give a s**t what you think about poetry or my poems. You know nothing and I know that so give up.

Have fun being reported.

haha mhmm so you make a forum to report other people this is just a poor excuse of giving up its kinda funny

I didn't report you. And this is a thread, dear. I only report trolls who have nothing constructive to say about my poetry and who think they are being intelligent by smothering others with their views.

[XDemonic-DeviDomX]

AlambiqueCiel

surprised

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

You are probably the most annoying, ignorant troll/noob I've met on here. I really don't give a s**t what you think about poetry or my poems. You know nothing and I know that so give up.

Have fun being reported.

haha mhmm so you make a forum to report other people this is just a poor excuse of giving up its kinda funny

I didn't report you. And this is a thread, dear. I only report trolls who have nothing constructive to say about my poetry and who think they are being intelligent by smothering others with their views.[/quote

so in other words you made a thread where you can judge others with harshness but yet you cant recieve bad feedback that sounds so fair hehe uber fail XD

[AlambiqueCiel]

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

surprised

XDemonic-DeviDomX

AlambiqueCiel

You are probably the most annoying, ignorant troll/noob I've met on here. I really don't give a s**t what you think about poetry or my poems. You know nothing and I know that so give up.

Have fun being reported.

haha mhmm so you make a forum to report other people this is just a poor excuse of giving up its kinda funny

I didn't report you. And this is a thread, dear. I only report trolls who have nothing constructive to say about my poetry and who think they are being intelligent by smothering others with their views.

so in other words you made a thread where you can judge others with harshness but yet you cant recieve bad feedback that sounds so fair hehe uber fail XD

Hey person, you gave me no damn feedback on my work.

Go do something and leave me alone.

[Splediferous Masochism]

*lassos Ciel in and steers her back to Rumi actually trying to give her productive advice* He's not a mindreader, doll. Tell him which parts of it didn't make sense to you, and I'm sure he'll explain them.

[AlambiqueCiel]

Your Proud Jester

*lassos Ciel in and steers her back to Rumi actually trying to give her productive advice* He's not a mindreader, doll. Tell him which parts of it didn't make sense to you, and I'm sure he'll explain them.

Well..well I don't know really but I couldn't get anything from it sweatdrop