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I can hear a never-ending buzz.
Vibrating to my ears.
The soft cold thin air.
Embracing.
I looked up
Stared at the ceiling
Thinking
Why am I still awake
Despite of the night's horror
Of what it can cause
Nightmares? Ghastly illusions?
Strange noises of things falling apart.
I might be afraid
But it might also be
The calling of the night
Where the sleepless
Stays awake.
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The content of the poem is intriquing, and most of the chosen phrasing I can get on board with. However, I noticed quite a variety in your structure regarding punctuation. At some points in the poem they are a constant, at others non existant. While this caught my attention is was not in a positive way, as I found it distracting. Other than that I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing. Also my opinion is just one, perhaps I am off base, I've been wrong before...
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The content of the poem is intriquing, and most of the chosen phrasing I can get on board with. However, I noticed quite a variety in your structure regarding punctuation. At some points in the poem they are a constant, at others non existant. While this caught my attention is was not in a positive way, as I found it distracting. Other than that I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing. Also my opinion is just one, perhaps I am off base, I've been wrong before...


T-thank you sweatdrop emotion_c8

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