California Seagull

[Feegle]

No poet here, but the mood took me to try something.


california seagull. flippity flappity flop.
where do you fly?
over the bay?
the tip of the sky
is a perch you say?
miles and miles
out to sea
wind in the face
without gravity
further you fly
away from the shore
toward the horizon
the more I implore
you never saw me
somewhere out there
I can't see you
between surf and the air
and home you head. flippity flappty flop.

[2pound]

this was an unexpected surprise. i liked it though you could use a bit more punctuation to guide the reader and give the poem a more "airy" flow, if you catch my 'drif'.

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ugh, no more double entendres from me. i promise.

[Feegle]

2pound

this was an unexpected surprise. i liked it though you could use a bit more punctuation to guide the reader and give the poem a more "airy" flow, if you catch my 'drif'.

.....

ugh, no more double entendres from me. i promise.

Thanks for taking a look. You make a good point. I'll take a look at it again with fresh eyes tomorrow to see if I can make it a bit easier to read.