Blood thickens *Flames are welcome!*

[Some_onna45]

*warning*I write dark poems...just letting ya know....sometimes I make my poems rhyme...sometimes I don't....

The blood thickens...
leaving a trail...
Of red water...
on the pavement
there is no help
no need of word
911 causes despair
I don't need your help
I'm broken
I'll save myself
like other times
so don't come
don't show up
like many other times
you're not an allie...
So...goodbye

[Army_Girl]

It's pretty good. Dark poem have the most power. Needs a few touch ups, but good.

[Some_onna45]

Army_Girl

It's pretty good. Dark poem have the most power. Needs a few touch ups, but good.

Thankies

[Delecross]

nice poem...dark poems are the most honest ones.

[Shadow_Spark]

Very nice, you just need to fix a few spelling related errors... Besides that it's very nice. I write dark poems too. As well as writing both rhyming poems and ones without rhyming.

[The rebel prince!]

Flamming?


surprised

Its not poetry to me if you type in net speak

so you get no flamming


good job on a generic junior high school suicide note though wink

gonk

[Some_onna45]

Hey hey hey! Thank you for the comments everyone!!! I'm so happy!!! blaugh xd so nice, and yes I love writing suicide poems...i'm glad you all like it...very nice people xd

[Delecross]

Beautiful_Day

Flamming?


surprised

Its not poetry to me if you type in net speak

so you get no flamming


good job on a generic junior high school suicide note though wink

gonk

Isn't a suicide note poetry? Your pouring your last words onto a single sheet of paper. A suicide note is one of the most highest poetic writings around. it wields alot of emotion...knowing that you are writing of your own death. I myself think its an awesome poem. You should be more open minded of what you read

[Some_onna45]

Delecross

Beautiful_Day

Flamming?


surprised

Its not poetry to me if you type in net speak

so you get no flamming


good job on a generic junior high school suicide note though wink

gonk

Isn't a suicide note poetry? Your pouring your last words onto a single sheet of paper. A suicide note is one of the most highest poetic writings around. it wields alot of emotion...knowing that you are writing of your own death. I myself think its an awesome poem. You should be more open minded of what you read

eek Thank you!

[Delecross]

your welcome. keep up the good work biggrin

[Some_onna45]

Delecross

your welcome. keep up the good work biggrin

xd

[The rebel prince!]

Delecross

Beautiful_Day

Flamming?


surprised

Its not poetry to me if you type in net speak

so you get no flamming


good job on a generic junior high school suicide note though wink

gonk

Isn't a suicide note poetry? Your pouring your last words onto a single sheet of paper. A suicide note is one of the most highest poetic writings around. it wields alot of emotion...knowing that you are writing of your own death. I myself think its an awesome poem. You should be more open minded of what you read

Son

that aint poetry

Look up any poet

whitman, doty, frost

if you put "ur" in a poem, its not poetry

I don't need some little pretentious brat telling what's poetry and whats not

A poem isnt just about raw emotion, it needs more

suicide notes arent poetry

so there goes your whole thesis

[Some_onna45]

Beautiful_Day

Delecross

Beautiful_Day

Flamming?


surprised

Its not poetry to me if you type in net speak

so you get no flamming


good job on a generic junior high school suicide note though wink

gonk

Isn't a suicide note poetry? Your pouring your last words onto a single sheet of paper. A suicide note is one of the most highest poetic writings around. it wields alot of emotion...knowing that you are writing of your own death. I myself think its an awesome poem. You should be more open minded of what you read

Son

that aint poetry

Look up any poet

whitman, doty, frost

if you put "ur" in a poem, its not poetry

I don't need some little pretentious brat telling what's poetry and whats not

A poem isnt just about raw emotion, it needs more

suicide notes arent poetry

so there goes your whole thesis

well I fixed it, so don't start an argument with anyone...oh yah and suicide are poems if you go to a site you can see so obviously, you don't read that kind of stuff and im not going to argue with you

[The rebel prince!]

I really want to agrue with you

but I will respect your request and just bury the hachet.

gonk

[Some_onna45]

hi