Anyone wanna read my short poem?

[cosmic dreaming]

I was found, and now I don't roam these streets

So, I've done some writing recently, and it mostly revolves around a theme of feminism and positive body image. I'd like to get some feedback on it, so I'll post it here and hopefully it'll grab some attention. I think I'm going to call it "I'm Sick Of Guys Asking To Hold My Tits So I Wrote This."

People act like they're entitled to my body because I like to show it off
I'm like an art museum, you can look but you can't touch
You'd respect Da Vinci, Dali, Rembrant, and Van Gogh,
Why not respect my creations?
I am beautiful
And I am unique
I can't make copies of my curves to hang on your wall
So until I find the one I want to take me home
I will remain in my own museum of beauty
And though I may return, by my own account or theirs,
I
Am
Not
Yours.

I am not the ghost you are to me

[LadySnark]

Post it in normal sized font and I'll read it.

[GH0ULFRIEND]

GinnaaayMarie

People act like they're entitled to my body because I like to show it off
I'm like an art museum, you can look but you can't touch
You'd respect Da Vinci, Dali, Rembrant, and Van Gogh,
Why not respect my creations?
I am beautiful
And I am unique
I can't make copies of my curves to hang on your wall
So until I find the one I want to take me home
I will remain in my own museum of beauty
And though I may return, by my own account or theirs,
I
Am
Not
Yours.

I like it! I wish that more people (especially women) now would realize that they don't belong to anyone that they don't want to belong to. Their mind, body, and soul belong to them and them alone no matter what you wear, what you say, what you do, or who you're with. Rock on!

The only critique I might make is that the words "of beauty" at the end of line 9 kind of sound odd in my opinion. I think if you just left it with just "I will remain in my own museum" it would sound better.

[cosmic dreaming]

Sinister Obsession

GinnaaayMarie

People act like they're entitled to my body because I like to show it off
I'm like an art museum, you can look but you can't touch
You'd respect Da Vinci, Dali, Rembrant, and Van Gogh,
Why not respect my creations?
I am beautiful
And I am unique
I can't make copies of my curves to hang on your wall
So until I find the one I want to take me home
I will remain in my own museum of beauty
And though I may return, by my own account or theirs,
I
Am
Not
Yours.

I like it! I wish that more people (especially women) now would realize that they don't belong to anyone that they don't want to belong to. Their mind, body, and soul belong to them and them alone no matter what you wear, what you say, what you do, or who you're with. Rock on!

The only critique I might make is that the words "of beauty" at the end of line 9 kind of sound odd in my opinion. I think if you just left it with just "I will remain in my own museum" it would sound better.

Good point! Thanks for the comment, I kind of felt like that line was awkward, but I didn't really know how to change it very well.