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I don't know why I wrote this, other than I felt inspired by the movie Stranger than fiction, and how I feel the same way sometimes about it.

I published this on my account, candylamia, on deviant art, if you'd like to see more.

Stranger than Fiction
From playing a string of my heart
To the vidid nightmares of dreams
I wonder with this world
if I ever will make my eternity

If this plot of my story
to live a hermit life
But if this is to be
I don't want to be

I just want to look at those fair eyes
so fair and gentle, that, it makes me smile
but perhaps, even if it cannot be
I want it to be

Am I this crazy?
To hear no voices
But a narrator that reads my fears
My thoughts, my dreams, all plattered at once
I hate it, I hate this, I hate feeling so alone

But when I talk to you, it makes me smile
just a bit, just once again in my hideous life
My hideous selfishness of wanting love
Who less deserves love than I?

Who deserves the very happiness
that I myself loathe the fear of having
to a wretched end that I will conquer
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Dapper Fatcat

I'd like some constructive criticism. I don't know how to feel this moment.
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Fluffy Kitten

I feel like the wording doesn't flow/is awkward in a few places like:

(If this plot of my story
to live a hermit life)

Other than that I don't really have any other critque~
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Dapper Fatcat

Sangfleur
I feel like the wording doesn't flow/is awkward in a few places like:

(If this plot of my story
to live a hermit life)

Other than that I don't really have any other critque~


That's a style I have developed. Awkwardness. XD But thanks. I'll keep an eye out for those in the future, to see if they flow better. I guess it's just how I write. :3
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I don't remember authorising this.....
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Dapper Fatcat

x Stranger than Fiction x
I don't remember authorising this.....


.. Oh. Sorry. o-o I must of used your name without realizing it. Sorry. D: I wrote this poem while watching the movie Stranger than Fiction. x.x
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x Stranger than Fiction x
I don't remember authorising this.....


.. Oh. Sorry. o-o I must of used your name without realizing it. Sorry. D: I wrote this poem while watching the movie Stranger than Fiction. x.x


LOL!
I was just trying to be funny.
No offence whatsoever and I apologise for the misunderstanding smile
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Dapper Fatcat

x Stranger than Fiction x
candybasilisk
x Stranger than Fiction x
I don't remember authorising this.....


.. Oh. Sorry. o-o I must of used your name without realizing it. Sorry. D: I wrote this poem while watching the movie Stranger than Fiction. x.x


LOL!
I was just trying to be funny.
No offence whatsoever and I apologise for the misunderstanding smile


Oh, okay. I didn't want you to be offended. :3 xD But thanks for letting me know, and it's all good. x3

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