7 DAYS

[kitty_kinky101]

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

[Mule Epidemic]

kitty_kinky101

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

It couild be better. Would be a hell of a lot beytter if it rhymed. Pretty good though, except the "Eyes wide shut" thing... That's a little... Not... Right... ~hands you a black rose.~ Good luck to yee.

[Emerald Serpent]

its ok i guess. personaly i think it should rhyme to *hands you yet annother black rose* start a collection blaugh

[Mule Epidemic]

o.O Sure, start a collection...

[Emerald Serpent]

biggrin

[Bucho]

~hands you a bright pink rose~ HA I WIN ...anyway.. its an ok poem, i think i've heard it before tho.

[Emerald Serpent]

ahh pink roses burn my eyes!! how could you betray me??!! jk blaugh

[gastronomic cannibalism]

Pretty bad. It doesn't flow, it's boring, it lacks any meaning.

[Bucho]

Emerald Serpent

ahh pink roses burn my eyes!! how could you betray me??!! jk blaugh

woooo

[Tacklebox Nebula]

Dull.
It was definately written for shock factor,
And it's not getting it.
"Eyes wide shut" is actually a very common phrase.

Death/demise/knife/blood/body= LAME.

[UnwrittenPath]

VampireMistressShinigami

kitty_kinky101

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

It couild be better. Would be a hell of a lot beytter if it rhymed. Pretty good though, except the "Eyes wide shut" thing... That's a little... Not... Right... ~hands you a black rose.~ Good luck to yee.

I'm sorry but you obviously think too in the box. I liked the poem quite a bit. Poems do not need to rhyme in any way shape or form. The "eyes wide shut" was the best part because it's abstract in a way and it makes you think (if you actually know the mind of a poet). It makes me feel that your eyes are shut but you're seeing beyond the relm of "sight" that we conciously know of.

[kitty_kinky101]

UnwrittenPath

VampireMistressShinigami

kitty_kinky101

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

It couild be better. Would be a hell of a lot beytter if it rhymed. Pretty good though, except the "Eyes wide shut" thing... That's a little... Not... Right... ~hands you a black rose.~ Good luck to yee.

I'm sorry but you obviously think too in the box. I liked the poem quite a bit. Poems do not need to rhyme in any way shape or form. The "eyes wide shut" was the best part because it's abstract in a way and it makes you think (if you actually know the mind of a poet). It makes me feel that your eyes are shut but you're seeing beyond the relm of "sight" that we conciously know of.

I knew my poem would get one of these types of ppl. Sry but this poem was meant to get flamed.

[UnwrittenPath]

kitty_kinky101

UnwrittenPath

VampireMistressShinigami

kitty_kinky101

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

It couild be better. Would be a hell of a lot beytter if it rhymed. Pretty good though, except the "Eyes wide shut" thing... That's a little... Not... Right... ~hands you a black rose.~ Good luck to yee.

I'm sorry but you obviously think too in the box. I liked the poem quite a bit. Poems do not need to rhyme in any way shape or form. The "eyes wide shut" was the best part because it's abstract in a way and it makes you think (if you actually know the mind of a poet). It makes me feel that your eyes are shut but you're seeing beyond the relm of "sight" that we conciously know of.

I knew my poem would get one of these types of ppl. Sry but this poem was meant to get flamed.

Ahh I see, another one of those types who like to use angst in a satire form.

[kitty_kinky101]

UnwrittenPath

kitty_kinky101

UnwrittenPath

VampireMistressShinigami

kitty_kinky101

If you truly wish to read highlight below...
Now with knife in hand
Blood on floor
Eyes wide shut
Where my body lies
My demise caused by my own
Future reference to death
So please let me see you one more time
No I never hated you

It couild be better. Would be a hell of a lot beytter if it rhymed. Pretty good though, except the "Eyes wide shut" thing... That's a little... Not... Right... ~hands you a black rose.~ Good luck to yee.

I'm sorry but you obviously think too in the box. I liked the poem quite a bit. Poems do not need to rhyme in any way shape or form. The "eyes wide shut" was the best part because it's abstract in a way and it makes you think (if you actually know the mind of a poet). It makes me feel that your eyes are shut but you're seeing beyond the relm of "sight" that we conciously know of.

I knew my poem would get one of these types of ppl. Sry but this poem was meant to get flamed.

Ahh I see, another one of those types who like to use angst in a satire form.

sry but your spelling is horrible so that made no sense