Clover_IceQueen
Mereluna
Clover_IceQueen
I dear... That can't be a good sign. You have to put the reader's focus on the protagonist first before any minor characters.
I think I might try to rework it so his arc is contained in the prologue, and shift the attention to his wife during the first chapter. She's really proving to be more likeable and compelling to me, and I planned to kill the guy off anyway.
ninja
eek Why you kill the husband?
gonk That's justs ort of how I saw his story going form the start. He sets off this big change in the world, and he can't reconcile his guilt with it, so eventually he throws himself of a building.
sweatdrop I might make it an accident to add to the mystery of the big discovery, though.
This thread is helpful.
whee I had writer's block before this!