do you love my new song?

[waterfall32]

i see a light ,
that's brighter than any other light,
it's shines so bright in the night,
i know i am alone but
it makes me feel at home. heart heart












Don't try to steal my song because i already had it copy writed.

[waterfall32]

also you trry and that would be just so wrong

[11alexia11]

Where are the other parts of the song? I read it first then the second time round I sung it. Sounded pretty good.

[A B Up Start]

literally half a verse. very cliche` rhymes.

also, those are lyrics, songs usually consist of music as well.

[waterfall32]

thanks. i alreadyknow the beat but i don't know how to show people it over the internet

[m4ddie]

It's a start! Keep going, could turn into something beautiful smile

[-I Am Foxx-]

not really

[waterfall32]

thanks for encouraging me ....for others who don't encourage or don't like it leave me alone

[Post Rock]

nice!

i wrote a little poem today too!

Let, instead, a word be a thousand pictures
and for every picture, a meaning
the miracle of communication, often overlooked
in it's ambiguity comes elegance
in it's volatility, come grace
oh, i didn't know what you meant
was supposed to hit me in the face

idk if it can be made into a song, though. i usually do instrumentals :p.

but anyone can have it (don't really believe in copyrights for creativity ^_-)

[JenuineJenny]

The lyrics do sound great, and very encourageing! However I do have one minor suggestion.
The first 3 or so lines seem a ligghle.. "ight" heavy if you know what I mean. (i.e. "light" "night" "bright" and "light" again). Try looking up some other words to use and limit the "ight" sound. If that makes sense. I'm not sure how to explain it.

But I absolutely love it too~ the concept is great.

[waterfall32]

thanks for trying to help.i look up more words with "ight".thanks.great suggestion. heart heart heart heart

[Yanii Marie]

waterfall32

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I think if you sang it and posted the file, that'd be a good way to show us the beat. I'd love to hear your voice with the lyrics before I give you any real feedback(:

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