zero the last decepticon
parallax protected
maybe start with something easier?
surprised
Nah.
I can do it, if it stays up for too long.
Besides, Astaire will take a shot at it.
I'm just giving her the time.
Yeah, if "taking a shot" means "taking a s**t," because this attempt is absolutely awful.
So, here's what I tried to capture here: Saul Williams has an amazing use of repetition and constant, constant imagery.
Mainly, though, I notice that he has an affinity for strong messages. So, above all, I tried to write a poem with a strong message.
I failed. Miserably. But perhaps you can all take a shot at this one (since I'm wondering if it has any redeeming value):
Girls,
there's a Hunger under the streets:
it feeds on our guts; our glory; it fills
its belly with the stars in the sky. It smashes
streetlamps and laps up the light
in our eyes. The starving strike a match
and light their white-wax bones on fire,
just to keep warm where the Hunger
has swallowed the sun.
Thin girls walk single-file to gyms, Sunday schools,
malls: narrow hallways lead to labyrinths
of monsters who consume the living
and Slim-Fast with the flavoring absent.
Lost among the pretenders,
Mothers turn to bartenders, perfecting the art
of wasting into machines, sweating
into a shotglass so the Hunger can shoot
it down with a bit of sugar to
soften the taste.
But I see the skeleton girls shot down
in gustatory wars between the image and the sounds:
a thousand crude voices with venomous spit
burning my body 'til there's nothing left of it but
the pits of my stomach, turning where there once
was a yearning but now there's nothing but a sidewalk
covered in broken branches: bodies become twigs
and we're all breaking. Girls, there's a Hunger
and it's shaking the streets; if you feel it growling
beneath your feet, run and
don't let it take you
under.