Majah's FanFictions(Bleach, CCS and Gakuen Alice)

[Laine_Purple]

No UpDates crying !!

[Meigumii]

Laine_Purple

No UpDates crying !!

Majah-san is busy at a business(?) trip 3nodding

[Laine_Purple]

ic~ hmm thx alot ^_^

[Meigumii]

Laine_Purple

ic~ hmm thx alot ^_^

I can't wait for un update, though whee

[Majah]

Sorry...I just got back *is fresh from the airport* I haven't gotten around in finishing the next chapter.

[Meigumii]

Majah

Sorry...I just got back *is fresh from the airport* I haven't gotten around in finishing the next chapter.

Welcome back, once again blaugh

[Laine_Purple]

Majah

Sorry...I just got back *is fresh from the airport* I haven't gotten around in finishing the next chapter.

Hehe ~ yep yep ~ welcome backie !1 ^_^ blaugh

[purplemonkeyz]

Welcome back, Majah

[Majah]

domokun tnx

[kitsu3]

I've only read the first few paragraphs of the story, as I don't believe I'm familiar with the original storyline. Therefore, I didn't vote in the poll and my critiquing will have nothing to do with the originality of the story. From a purely technical standpoint, the first thing I noticed is that you need to watch your tenses. You switch from past to present to past again, and you do this continuously. There are also a few things you could have worded better, but that isn't as important. Good luck with your story--I see that many people like it.

[Meigumii]

kitsu3

I've only read the first few paragraphs of the story, as I don't believe I'm familiar with the original storyline. Therefore, I didn't vote in the poll and my critiquing will have nothing to do with the originality of the story. From a purely technical standpoint, the first thing I noticed is that you need to watch your tenses. You switch from past to present to past again, and you do this continuously. There are also a few things you could have worded better, but that isn't as important. Good luck with your story--I see that many people like it.

Oh? I didn't catch that sweatdrop Maybe it's because I do that a lot in my writing, too. I'm trying to break the habit of doing so.

[Majah]

kitsu3

I've only read the first few paragraphs of the story, as I don't believe I'm familiar with the original storyline. Therefore, I didn't vote in the poll and my critiquing will have nothing to do with the originality of the story. From a purely technical standpoint, the first thing I noticed is that you need to watch your tenses. You switch from past to present to past again, and you do this continuously. There are also a few things you could have worded better, but that isn't as important. Good luck with your story--I see that many people like it.

Actually, it was pointed out to me during those early times but I was just too lazy to edit everything. I got conscious of the tenses in around chapter 10. I don't know if it was mentioned in the first page, but since it was my very first fic I kinda let it be.

Anything I wrote beyond chapter 10 (including my other fic "covens" wink has better tense-awareness (if there is such a thing).

Maybe if I got some extra time, I can edit earlier chapters.

[Meigumii]

Oh yeah, that too... Harrr *so forgetful* sweatdrop

[Majah]

I'll do some writing tonight. 3nodding

[Meigumii]

Majah

I'll do some writing tonight. 3nodding

Yay! heart *sends you inspiration* whee