kamica ch.1

[Alicia of Darkness]

um this is my naruto rpc story chapter 1 just want to see if you guys like so please read.



You might have seen all the Naruto episodes and you might have read all the books but there is one character they left out, her name was Kamica. Her father was an Uchiha who was captured by Orochimaru, her mother was Sasori’s mother who before she was killed was held captive by Orochimaru for nine months then killed. She had her fathers black hair and blue eyes, but her mother’s personality. Orochimaru made Kamica to be the ultimate fighting machine. At the age of four she ran away from the sound village and found her way to Konoha, but barely got there alive, at the age of six she was able to use Sharingon.
“Help… me.” She whispered stumbling through the village gates.
“Someone alert Lord Hokage!” Se heard people shout as she lost conciseness.
When she woke up she was in a hospital bed and a man smoking a cigarette was in the corner.
“So you’re finally up, huh?” He said putting out the cigarette and walking towards the door. “Tell Lord Hokage she’s up.” He said to the man standing out side off the door, he then walked over to the bed. “My names Asuma,” He said pulling a lollypop from his pocket.
“I’m… Kamica.” She said before tearing the wrapper of the candy and sucking on it happily.
“So, I assume she’s doing well.” An old man said walking into the room.
“Yes and her names Kamica”. Asuma said.
“Hello Kamica I’m the Third Hokage of this village can you tell me what happened.”
“I don’t really know, all I remember is running away from something.” She said.
“Asuma, can I speak to you outside.” He said.
When they were outside the Hokage started.
“Can you adopt her?” He asked.
“What?” Asuma wondered why.
“She needs someone to protect her.” The Hokage said
“Why?” Asuma said
“She has a curse mark; we can’t let Orochimaru know she’s here.” The Hokage said
“Fine,” Asuma caved in after taking another glance at the innocent girl that was still sucking on the candy.

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[Alicia of Darkness]

ohj okay thanks ^^

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