Bard Kayna Ashkevron
While I have to agree about the grammar and spelling, I'm glad you're enjoying writing your story!
Do you type this up in a word processor like Microsoft Word? If so, then it can spell-check your writing for you, and that should help fix some of the errors. If you're using Word and you see a little red line under a word, that means the word is misspelled. A green line means there's a grammar error.
Another thing I would suggest is reading the books. If you'd read them, you would know that Dumbledore would be dead at the time this story takes place.
Thanx but i think i have not got that on my computer, i use word pan.
Also i am not as mad as i was b4 cuz i relized that it dose not matter wut other ppl feels they have the rite to feel bad but personaly i wuold stop to read a story that i did not like!!!
soon i will pots my next capie and i hope sum ppl will like ie!!!