19 years later

[valetina101]

ok first of all it is relly good the second that was rude of you evil

[Dansbabygrl]

The two sets of best friends talked to eachother privately. Belle then checked the time. It was nearly five in the evening. She gasped. "Rose, we have to get Americus to leave. It's nearly five," Belle whispered to her friend. Rose nodded.

"Lexie, do you know when you're getting out?" Americus asked, looking at Lexie. Lexie looked down and shook her head. "Not yet. I keep asking and they just say 'soon'," Lexie said quietly. Americus frowned. "I wish it was now." Lexie nodded in agreement.

Isabelle got up, went over to the bed and said, "Americus, I know you don't want to go, but it's about five. We have to go now. It's been lovely seing you, Lexie. Hope you get out soon."

Americus didn't know what to say. She didn't want to leave. She wanted to stay with her best friend. Americus was also quite tired and hungry.

"Ok. Fine, we can leave sad " Americus said, frowning. She hugged Lexie goodbye, said she would be back another time, and she left.

Once back at hogsmeade, the three girls tried to sneak back into the castle without being noticed. Once in the castle, the girls walked to the Gryffindor Common Room.

Once in the Common Room, the three girls were staring right into the eyes of the Head Mistress. "Hello, Professor. What are you doing in the Common Room? Isn't it dinner time?" Belle said, looking innocent, or trying to.

Professor McGonagall looked at the three girls, then said, "I got news from St. Mungo's that three Hogwarts students had gone there. I looked around for you three and didnt find you here at school so I knew it had to be you three. I was right. Detention, all of you, tomorrow, my office. Ok?" The three girls nodded, looking down in shame.

[Ridgebackruler212]

This story is so awesome. I've always wanted to continue typing what would happen after th e 7th book. Guess now i cant blaugh . Good job! biggrin

[Harry P0tt3r Fangir1]

Cooool

[Dansbabygrl]

Renee and James would always sneak away during classes to get some privacy. They would also try to avoid getting caught by Isabelle. Isabelle would be very suspicious of her sister when she would see her come out of a room that was, well, not supposed to be used by students.

Albus and Regi wasn't like that, but did want time alone. They would try to find time during the weekend to be alone if not with their friends, Nathalie and Jimmy, Edward and his new girl Kim. Edward was so happy with Kim he would actually stand up for himself! Whenever Emmett came to make fun of Edward, Edward would get up and take his wand out himself and challenge to do something to him, Emmett, that is.

"Bro, what are you doing here?" Albus asked James one day when he found his brother come out of the Room of Requirement. "Uh I uh..um.." James stuttered. Albus raised an eyebrow. "Well?" He said. "I was..um..seeing what kind of room it was that's all. Um.well yea," James said after a few minutes of silence.

Renee then came out from the door and Albus gasped. "James! You-" Albus started. "Albus, don't you start! We weren't doing anything! We were just looking around!" James exclaimed. Albus shook his head in disbelief and walked off.

[valetina101]

keep writing

[Dansbabygrl]

James watched his little brother walk off before turning to Renee. "That was a close one, don't you think?" Renee nodded her head. "Yes, but now we have to be careful" James agreed and walked to class holding hands with Renee.

Americus was still waiting for news on Lexie. She really wanted her back in school. She missed having someone to talk to before and after class. During meals, she sat by herself eating very little. Isabelle got very worried about Americus. "You alright, Americus?" Belle asked one day after dinner. Americus nodded. "Yes, i am. Why?" "You barely eat meals. You hardly talk to anyone. You seem depressed, Americus. Talk to me," Belle said.

Americus sighed and told Isabelle everything that was bothering her. When she was done, she had tears in her eyes. Isabelle hugged and comforted Americus till it was time to go to Gryffindor Tower.

"Aw look who we have here. Baby crying Felton. hahaha. what a baby. Let's go boys" Emmette said, turning after coming up to Americus and Isabelle. Isabelle let go of Americus to turn to Emmette. "Mr. Parkinson. Want to say something like an apology? Or get a detention and points taken from Slytherin. Want that?" Isabelle said, smirking even though she wasn't suppose to.

Emmette turned back around. "Ms. Swan. I would love to give Felton an apology but since she is a cry baby and all. Oh, don't forget a Gryffindor, I won't. But I also won't want a detention and points taken from Slytherin because you---oh you can. Sorry. But i WILL talk to Headmistress about this little talk, Swan." Emmette turned once more and left with his friends

[Dansbabygrl]

Belle watched Emmette walk off before turning back to Americus. "I'm sorry, Americus. I'll also have a talk with HeadMistress about Emmette. ok?" Belle said. Americus nodded, tears still coming down her face.

Lexie was still in St. Mungo's when she heard the news of Americus' incedent. She didn't like the news. She wanted to be there at Hogwarts, with her best friend. Lexie was really hating St. Mungo's now. She wanted out NOW. Lexie wanted her best friend NOW.

Albus and Regi were having a wonderful day one Saturday when James walked up to Albus. "Albus, HeadMistress wants us. She said its important," James said, turning and walking away. Albus looked at Regi who looked back and walked with Albus to the Headmistress' office.

"James, Albus, I just got an owl from your parents, well, father. You need to get home straight away. It's your sister. She's gotten sick. She's not getting better either. You need to get home to see her. She'd love to see her brothers before she goes to St. Mungo's if she has to. I'll send you by portkey. you guys ready to go?" HeadMistress said, looking from James to Albus. James nodded for both him and Albus.

[Dansbabygrl]

McGonagall looked at the brothers, "So, you two ready to go to the portkey, which is that goblet over on the desk." McGonagall pointed to her desk. James nodded at the headmistress knowing that he knew what she meant. Albus did as well. They took a hold of the goblet and counted to three. They were in their house in less than a minute.

"Mum?! Dad!?" James yelled into the empty living room. Ginny came rushing in to greet her sons. "Thank god you two are home! Your sister is very sick. She's been staying in bed all week," Ginny said. "Ginny! Come quick!" came Harry's voice from Lily's room. Ginny ran to Lily, followed by Albus and James.

James and Albus looked in Lily's room. They saw how pale she looked and how weak she was. "Lils, Albus and I are here now. It's alright. Don't be afraid. You'll be okay," James said,walking into Lily's room. "What do we do, Harry!? She's getting weaker and is very hot!" Ginny said, very worried. Harry looked at his wife, worried as well, "Call a healer, bring him here to see what he will say.

Ginny ran out of the room to call for a healer. Lily was very pale when Albus looked in. "Lils, it'll be alright, it will, you won't go to St. Mungo's i promise. I won't let them take you. I-" Albus said then burst into tears. Harry took Albus out of the room and hugged him. "It's alright Albus. If Lily goes to St. Mungo's, she'll be alright there too, be protected, will get better quicker there. Okay?" Harry said, still hugging Albus.

Albus nodded, wiping tears away. James came out. "Dad, Lily's past out. She was speaking to me when she did. I don't know what to do. When's the healer going to be here?" James asked, a little scared and a little worried for his sister.

"Right now, actually, James. Please, give me space to go in. I need to take a look. Ok? I need to take a look at her. I won't hurt her real bad, James, Albus. She does need to get looked at to see what has to be happened next, though, okay?" said the healer coming to Lily's room. James nodded for him and his brother.

After a little examination, the healer looked at Ginny and Harry. "Mrs and Mr Potter, she needs to go to St. Mungo's. I'm sorry. I'll take her and you can follow. I'll meet you there now, ok?" the Healer said, taking hold of Lily and disapparating to St. Mungo's.

[valetina101]

omg!!! this is getting good

[Kyro_hakadashi]

oh...kay then... rofl

[Dansbabygrl]

Once at St. Mungo's, The Healer and Lily met Harry and Ginny there. James and Albus had stayed home with Hermione and Ron. Lily was crying in the Healer's arms. "Mummy!" she cried. "Mummy's here, Lils, Mummy's here," Ginny said, walking quickly to her daughter.

The Healer told the person at the front desk what was happening and then took the Potters' to the floor where Lily's sickness was. There, Lily was put into her own room. "Here, in here," said the Healer, leading Ginny and Harry into the room that he had put Lily in.

Ginny went straight to Lily. "Will she be alright?" Ginny asked, really anxious. The Healer thought about his answer. "We hope she'll get better real soon, Mrs. Potter. Now, you can stay with her for a little bit longer till we have to examine her okay?" Ginny nodded, sitting on Lily's bed next to Lily who was crying.

Harry was standing at the door, not knowing what to do. His daughter was really sick and in St. Mungo's. He was very upset that he let this happen. Harry didn't know what to do now. He stood there, watching his wife comfort their daughter who sat crying.

"Ok, Mrs. and Mr. Potter, you are going to have to go now. We have to examine, Lily. Sorry you can not be in while we do this. We will call you in, well send you an owl when we are done, ok? Go home, rest, take care of the boys. We'll take real good care of Lily here, we promise. Ok?" The Healer said, walking back into the room.

Lily cried when Ginny got up to leave. "I'm sorry, sweetie. Mummy has to go. I'll be back later or tomorrow, Lils. ok?" Ginny said, turning and leaving with Harry. Once home, James and Albus ran up to their parents. "How is Lily?!" James asked, very worried. "She'll be ok, they say, James," Harry said, walking to Ginny and his room.

Ginny went into the kitchen to get something to drink. "You boys hungry?" Ginny asked her sons. James came into the kitchen. "I am. I don't know about Albus though. He ate before you got home. You can ask him though," James said.

Ginny nodded, went to ask Albus if he was hungry, who said no. Ginny called Kreacher. "Kreacher, can you make some dinner for Harry, James, and I?" Ginny asked the house elf. Kreacher nodded and walked into the kitchen to start making the dinner.

When dinner was served, Ginny called Harry down. Harry came down to eat and then kissed Ginny good night and went to bed early. Ginny was a little worried about Harry as well. She didn't know what was wrong with him. He hadn't talked since their trip to St. Mungo's.

Maybe he'll be alright in the morning. He just needs sleep Ginny thought to her self.

[Tanith Tainted Hope]

Mariposa85

Darlin, I tried to help you in the past, but obviously it did very little - nice to see you using paragraphs and punctuation though. I might suggest offering plot ideas to other writers suffering from blockage instead of writing your own. I don't want to be mean or nasty, but this is not very well written. The story is poorly formatted, and rather pointless, thus far. Seriously "OMG"? That's terrible, sweetie.

On top of that, Prof. McGonagall is known to be retired by the time James and Albus attend Hogwarts, if she's not dead. She was already well into her 70's during Harry's time there.

I really think you might have a good plot idea, but you might consider offering it to someone with a little more talent. Sorry, I tried to be nice about it, but I can;t bring myself to lie to you and tell you it's good. It's not.

Can't stand the heat?

I enjoy this post because it's a fair bit kinder then what I am going to be. Infact, I'm going to make this post look like a nice bath.

No, I haven't read the whole thing so I'm not going to deal with plot issues, and I enjoy that you don't have this in small or brightly colored text so that means this isn't a flame.

This is not great, this isn't even good. It's choppy and blocky and ignores laws of grammar. One person per a paragraph when speaking. Add discription, you didn't have enough in the first post. Use normal size for your story and don't bold it, as it just makes it look worse. This is nothing like the books, it isn't even up to some of the half good fanfictions I've read. Try adding more flavor, discriptions, conversations to it as you size it down so that they come out to be the same lenght and maybe you'll have a quarter good fic, because at this point I don't even see potential in you.

Stay out of the fire.

[-redundantly-]

I'm not even going to try to be kind.

'Omg'? 'Wtf'? Seriously? No. You don't use those in writing unless you're writing a scene where your character is chatting online.

sad and smile don't belong in a story.

It's poorly written and choppy. You're supposed to start a new paragraph each time a new person starts talking.

'Isabelle' Swan? Emmette? I'm assuming you read Twilight.

Ugh. This is not anything like the books, and it isn't even up there with some of the worse fanfictions out there. This really isn't decent writing.

[Dansbabygrl]

ok, first, i do not give a joder, about what you say, la zorra! second, people like what i am writing. So, la zorra, shut up, la zorra or beso mi culo! Cuz i'm going to continue writing it, no matter what the joder you say. got it, zorra? gracias. adios!