Am I the only person who doesn't like it? .__.
I can appreciate the direction you're going it, the idea is cute inn retrospect.
But I find that it's like...one detail too simple. This looks like something that you could get out of Daily Chance (like Langor or something else that you can get a million of), not something I'd want to buy from CrossStitch. I think it's on its way, but you can continue tweaking it. Try adding different details here and there, with different combinations...zippers, chains, other embellishments.
Best of luck to you sir. c: