The Story of Star and Lune - 13 pages

[mina352]

Majiki

I don't know if this has been said yet (pardon me if it has), but I highly, highly recommend going back to the first sets of pages and redrawing them on par with your current skills. Just tossing up a "warning" doesn't cut it.

For instance, the last page of your comic is okay. Its not excellent yet - but the reader can see you've got some of the basics down - it shows you have potential. The FIRST page is terrible and the reader won't take you seriously as an artist if they see that right off the bat.

Do yourself a favor and redo the beginning. Sometimes its fun to redo old work and see how much you've improved. =)

Good Luck.

Try reading the thread.

[Majiki]

mina352

Majiki

I don't know if this has been said yet (pardon me if it has), but I highly, highly recommend going back to the first sets of pages and redrawing them on par with your current skills. Just tossing up a "warning" doesn't cut it.

For instance, the last page of your comic is okay. Its not excellent yet - but the reader can see you've got some of the basics down - it shows you have potential. The FIRST page is terrible and the reader won't take you seriously as an artist if they see that right off the bat.

Do yourself a favor and redo the beginning. Sometimes its fun to redo old work and see how much you've improved. =)

Good Luck.

Try reading the thread.

It's not worth my time reading 17 pages of posts that weren't meant for me. This post was meant for the artist, not you. She can read it or disregard it as she pleases for she is the one responsible for each post. Not I.

[-2o]

You're being told to read the thread because if you had, you'd understand why the first couple of pages look like they do.

[Majiki]

-2o

You're being told to read the thread because if you had, you'd understand why the first couple of pages look like they do.

"(WARNING: this comic may not initially be representative of the artist's current artistic ability, Please proceed with caution.)"

Is what I was referring to when I wrote. The first few pages of posts from others on the thread are telling the artist she needs to do some life drawing and such to improve her skills, her replies were defending her works.

Now if there is something else I missed, I asked pardon for it in my original post. It is again, up to the ARTIST'S discretion whether or not to take my word, and to note whether or not my post is relevant to her concerns. As I have previously stated.

[mina352]

Majiki

-2o

You're being told to read the thread because if you had, you'd understand why the first couple of pages look like they do.

"(WARNING: this comic may not initially be representative of the artist's current artistic ability, Please proceed with caution.)"

Is what I was referring to when I wrote. The first few pages of posts from others on the thread are telling the artist she needs to do some life drawing and such to improve her skills, her replies were defending her works.

Now if there is something else I missed, I asked pardon for it in my original post. It is again, up to the ARTIST'S discretion whether or not to take my word, and to note whether or not my post is relevant to her concerns. As I have previously stated.

What you have missed is that in fact, the artist is quite an amazing artist and is choosing to draw the first few pages of her comic in a subpar way because she wanted to see how the CC would react to a comic drawn that way.

[Majiki]

mina352

Majiki

-2o

You're being told to read the thread because if you had, you'd understand why the first couple of pages look like they do.

"(WARNING: this comic may not initially be representative of the artist's current artistic ability, Please proceed with caution.)"

Is what I was referring to when I wrote. The first few pages of posts from others on the thread are telling the artist she needs to do some life drawing and such to improve her skills, her replies were defending her works.

Now if there is something else I missed, I asked pardon for it in my original post. It is again, up to the ARTIST'S discretion whether or not to take my word, and to note whether or not my post is relevant to her concerns. As I have previously stated.

What you have missed is that in fact, the artist is quite an amazing artist and is choosing to draw the first few pages of her comic in a subpar way because she wanted to see how the CC would react to a comic drawn that way.

Thank you. I did not read that. However, I will say yet again, the very first sentence of my post essentially tells you to disregard it if I had missed information, which I clearly have. Also, I did state what is probably a common reaction to the first few pages, so it's nonetheless not completely irrelevant.

Regardless of how talented she is in reality, or the intent of the style, the first few pages are a turn off. That was all I was trying to say.

[Mango-Kiki]

i like the ideas you give in, but right now, to me, there's no plot/depth. the characters do need a bit of work, and the art is ok but it can improve.
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