The Story of Star and Lune - 13 pages

[-2o]

It's nice to see improvement. keep going,OP.

[blinkanjell01]

Great improvement!

[utopiansky]

new page up for today!

[Madelide]

Wow. Page 7. Page 7 looked really good. It's like a massive jump of art style. And a good one too.

Also, good choice on getting the dialogues typewritten.

But... what happened? You reverted back to your previous mistakes and style in page 8?

Well, story-wise... still no improvement at all. But good job on taking in the critiques given to you here in CC.

[utopiansky]

they're not mistakes :c

[A BAD CASE OF HERPES]

utopiansky

they're not mistakes :c

rule #1 of art: if it looks like a mistake to everyone but you, fix it.

[utopiansky]

rule#2 : I think you just made that up

[KomiyanZaibach]

utopiansky

rule#2 : I think you just made that up

It's a bloody good one, mind.

[A BAD CASE OF HERPES]

utopiansky

rule#2 : I think you just made that up

not at all, i heard this from a really experienced painter when i was 13 or so.

but hey do whatever you want, it's your comic.

[utopiansky]

That's an opinion. I just don't think art has rules.

[blehblehblehffffffffffff]

No, sorry. Your opinion on whether art has rules or not does not actually shape the nature of reality.

But really, please keep telling an assortment of experienced artists that they are wrong.

[A BAD CASE OF HERPES]

utopiansky

I just don't think art has rules.

[utopiansky]

I'm not talking about someone's ability to render the human body, I'm talking about Art with a capital A.

I think you're confusing rules for conventions.

edit: uhh..yeah, that circle is right

[A BAD CASE OF HERPES]

utopiansky

I'm not talking about someone's ability to render the human body, I'm talking about Art with a capital A.

I think you're confusing rules for conventions.

no, i think you don't know a damn thing about art, that's what i think. there are plenty of ways to do it wrong. and you are doing it wrong.

[KomiyanZaibach]

utopiansky

I'm not talking about someone's ability to render the human body, I'm talking about Art with a capital A.

I think you're confusing rules for conventions.

edit: uhh..yeah, that circle is right

But isn't that what you're trying to do? Render the human body and place it in an environment, telling a story from picture to picture?

There ARE right ways and wrong ways to do this. It's a cute notion to think that simply trying real hard and pouring your heart and soul into it will somehow make it appealing to others, but it's naive and incorrect.