Sanguine Balladist
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- Posted: Sun, 12 Sep 2010 04:17:45 +0000
So I've been in the process of beginning to layout the basics for a cyberpunk themed web comic. I'm a big planner, and I hate going off half-cocked, so this is all in the development stages and nothing more. Which means no art until I get the story, characters, and general starting points down. I'm posting this here to hopefully get some feedback and criticism back in terms of what direction to go in and what needs to happen to pull of a long-term web comic. So first thing first is :
Plot Concept :
The World Unified Front is rotting from the inside out, corroding all hope and future that any of its citizens may hold. The problem lies with one man, Armand Stairn, the notorious leader of the WUF. International espionage, under-the-table deals, and a list of atrocities so long it could wrap around the world twice. His strength lies in fear and propaganda. His weakness? The small group of individuals planning on shifting the power back to the people.
1st Act : (20-30 pages)
Deals specifically with introducing the world and its layout. Overview of the city, the citizens, daily life, and everything that goes down behind closed doors. Rough, dirty, gritty, and hard to deal with. The only high point is the advanced technology which in and of itself, has only managed to crutch and destroy society from the inside out. However some know how to twist technology to their own benefit, rather then the WUF agenda. The last bit would make the entrance of main character1, holding a gun and standing over a recently dead body, barrel still smoking.
2nd Act : (30-40 pages)
The beginning introduction would start with something along the lines of 'Three months. Three months I've been waiting for this, training for this, making sure every detail is perfect. Personal gun training, extensive information manipulation and data streaming, late night video surveillance. All this time and...I killed the wrong man.' It would proceed with him heading back to a rather rundown and plain apartment complex and reporting back to the other two main characters. Cutting from the three main characters it would show the peace keepers arriving at the scene of the crime, and focusing on one in particular which finds something odd with the entire situation (protagonist 1).
I have a few more chapters planned out in a very loose manner, but I figured this would be good enough to get an idea from for now. I hope. As I said, I'm still heavily in the brain storming phase and absolutely nothing is finalized from setting, characters, direction, or names.
Characters :
Main Character1 : A younger boy (18-19) of average height. His hair is dyed white along with excessive ear piercings (5 or more) and sports tattoos on his right shoulder, usually covered. His eyes are blue. Tends to wear baggy clothes; sweatshirts, heavy t shirts, etc.
The youngest of the three, he has a lot to learn and due to that he thinks he has a lot to prove. His niche lies in computer hacking and information warfare and often stumbles upon information that is damaging to his health. He's generally a teenage boy; a bit stand offish, loud, and desperate to make himself known one way or another.
Main Character2 : An older man (27-30) that stands a bit taller then most. His shaggy and unkempt brown hair matches his chin stubble rather well, he likes to think. He has no noticeable features aside from a small scar under his chest which is hidden 99% of the time, along with rich brown eyes. He wears simple suits for the most part, to make up for his rather poor class status, though it doesn't fool anyone.
The oldest of the trio, he takes everything in stride and likes to give his two-cents even when others don't necessarily want it. Generally the voice of reason, he is a calm and collected person that would like nothing more then to own a business of his own someday, though that seems highly unlikely.
Main Character3 : A rough around the edges woman (22-25) of average height. Blonde hair kept just bellow her ears, and artificial eyes that are deep red. Her most noticeable feature (aside from her eyes) is the tattoo beneath her right eye. She wears low cut vests along with a t-shirt underneath, and slender pants.
The head of the entire operation she can seem cold and aloof at points, though she generally has her team's best interest at heart. She takes care of the weapons, costs, and connections that will eventually make their overthrow possible. Her emotions can get the best of her, and its generally better not to do something wrong in regards of the operation.
Armand Stairn : The self appointed and cold hearted leader of the UWF, he rules with an iron fist and a poison tongue. Every word he says is law, regardless of how much pressure it puts on the little people. Everything he does is for self gain, and someday he hopes to achieve something far greater then what he currently has. The only question is, what?
Protagonist1 : An under payed and overworked peace keeper for the UWF he has no family to speak of aside from his often lonely cat. His work is his life and he feels personally responsible for every case that lands on his desk, no matter how trivial it may seem.
I have numerous sub characters in my head, but I'm sure that they don't need to be listed along with the main characters exactly yet in this stage.
Questions :
Do you see anything wrong/obnoxious right away with anything in general?
Any comments about using Smackjeeves as a comic hosting site for now?
Comments/Suggestions?
Plot Concept :
The World Unified Front is rotting from the inside out, corroding all hope and future that any of its citizens may hold. The problem lies with one man, Armand Stairn, the notorious leader of the WUF. International espionage, under-the-table deals, and a list of atrocities so long it could wrap around the world twice. His strength lies in fear and propaganda. His weakness? The small group of individuals planning on shifting the power back to the people.
1st Act : (20-30 pages)
Deals specifically with introducing the world and its layout. Overview of the city, the citizens, daily life, and everything that goes down behind closed doors. Rough, dirty, gritty, and hard to deal with. The only high point is the advanced technology which in and of itself, has only managed to crutch and destroy society from the inside out. However some know how to twist technology to their own benefit, rather then the WUF agenda. The last bit would make the entrance of main character1, holding a gun and standing over a recently dead body, barrel still smoking.
2nd Act : (30-40 pages)
The beginning introduction would start with something along the lines of 'Three months. Three months I've been waiting for this, training for this, making sure every detail is perfect. Personal gun training, extensive information manipulation and data streaming, late night video surveillance. All this time and...I killed the wrong man.' It would proceed with him heading back to a rather rundown and plain apartment complex and reporting back to the other two main characters. Cutting from the three main characters it would show the peace keepers arriving at the scene of the crime, and focusing on one in particular which finds something odd with the entire situation (protagonist 1).
I have a few more chapters planned out in a very loose manner, but I figured this would be good enough to get an idea from for now. I hope. As I said, I'm still heavily in the brain storming phase and absolutely nothing is finalized from setting, characters, direction, or names.
Characters :
Main Character1 : A younger boy (18-19) of average height. His hair is dyed white along with excessive ear piercings (5 or more) and sports tattoos on his right shoulder, usually covered. His eyes are blue. Tends to wear baggy clothes; sweatshirts, heavy t shirts, etc.
The youngest of the three, he has a lot to learn and due to that he thinks he has a lot to prove. His niche lies in computer hacking and information warfare and often stumbles upon information that is damaging to his health. He's generally a teenage boy; a bit stand offish, loud, and desperate to make himself known one way or another.
Main Character2 : An older man (27-30) that stands a bit taller then most. His shaggy and unkempt brown hair matches his chin stubble rather well, he likes to think. He has no noticeable features aside from a small scar under his chest which is hidden 99% of the time, along with rich brown eyes. He wears simple suits for the most part, to make up for his rather poor class status, though it doesn't fool anyone.
The oldest of the trio, he takes everything in stride and likes to give his two-cents even when others don't necessarily want it. Generally the voice of reason, he is a calm and collected person that would like nothing more then to own a business of his own someday, though that seems highly unlikely.
Main Character3 : A rough around the edges woman (22-25) of average height. Blonde hair kept just bellow her ears, and artificial eyes that are deep red. Her most noticeable feature (aside from her eyes) is the tattoo beneath her right eye. She wears low cut vests along with a t-shirt underneath, and slender pants.
The head of the entire operation she can seem cold and aloof at points, though she generally has her team's best interest at heart. She takes care of the weapons, costs, and connections that will eventually make their overthrow possible. Her emotions can get the best of her, and its generally better not to do something wrong in regards of the operation.
Armand Stairn : The self appointed and cold hearted leader of the UWF, he rules with an iron fist and a poison tongue. Every word he says is law, regardless of how much pressure it puts on the little people. Everything he does is for self gain, and someday he hopes to achieve something far greater then what he currently has. The only question is, what?
Protagonist1 : An under payed and overworked peace keeper for the UWF he has no family to speak of aside from his often lonely cat. His work is his life and he feels personally responsible for every case that lands on his desk, no matter how trivial it may seem.
I have numerous sub characters in my head, but I'm sure that they don't need to be listed along with the main characters exactly yet in this stage.
Questions :
Do you see anything wrong/obnoxious right away with anything in general?
Any comments about using Smackjeeves as a comic hosting site for now?
Comments/Suggestions?
