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If you dont mind a little yaoi/BL come check out my webcomic
Chibi Yaoi (A Boy's Love Story)

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Okay so there isn't much for me to go on but from the pages I've read there are a couple of problem that stuck out for me.

For one the cover page is pretty underwhelming. If it was in colour or at least had a background then it it would be much more pleasing to the eye. Also it would make you look like you care about the webcomic just that little bit more.

Secondly, not to be rude but at the moment your characters have all contracted the deadly same face virus. Clothes and haircuts aside they all look the same. I know you're going for a manga style but even then there are no character to the faces. I really like the clothes though, and the cat's cute.

Also, the line work is pretty scribbly and could do with a clean up.

Honestly the crux of the problems with your webcomic is just how rushed it looks. If you could fix this problem then the webcomic would look a lot better and would probably fair better in a genre so over saturated with shite. I mean you're only 5 pages in so it's not too late to update the artwork, you know?

Anyway, hope this helped!

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