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I am the writer for a manga, which I have begun to post (copywrited) on this website - MangaMagazine
I hope someday to have it published. But for now, I'm looking for opinions, critiques, generally any kind of feedback. Also, people to bounce ideas off of.
I usually put up a handful of pages every week, so check on or around Saturdays.
I look forward to hearing what you think

UPDATE: Volume one is just two chapters away from completion, and I've started to give some thought to how I want the finished product to be. First off, I will go over all the suggestions and critiques I have received and see what I can to to make improvements. But also, I'd like to include a purchase only volume extra treat as an extra incentive/thank you to buy the volume. To that end, I've started a poll HERE to gauge your opinions and decided on what kind of extra I will include. Please visit and vote

ANNOUNCEMENT: I am getting ready to pitch my manga to a publishing company! Unfortunately, that means I'm going to have to slow down with the updates. But don't worry, I'll still keep you all posted on when new pages are up

ANNOUNCEMENT: CrossOver now has 100 FANS! (+6) SO EXCITED! Started a forum to discuss some new things I'd like to try now that I've reached this goal. Would be thrilled if you would check it out and give me your opinion. 100 FANS! (+6)

ANNOUNCEMENT: I have started a donation fund for CrossOver. Don't worry, I'm not going to beg everyone for money. I'm just saying that if you like the comic and have a few extra bucks you can spare, any help would be greatly appreciated. With more money, I can make the updates more frequent and faster. Oh, did I mention there are rewards for donating? Check it out HERE Again, there is no pressure whatsoever.
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This. Is. AWESOME!!!!!
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This. Is. AWESOME!!!!!

Aaahhh stop it (but seriously, go on)
In all seriousness, can you tell me what you like about it?
That will help me keep it going well ninja
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This. Is. AWESOME!!!!!

Aaahhh stop it (but seriously, go on)
In all seriousness, can you tell me what you like about it?
That will help me keep it going well ninja
My favorite thing her her reaction to the fact that she can't go home. (plus "The witch is back!) I have never read anything like this.

Love the art style, its always a plus. She's smart enough not to tell anyone she can teleport until she finds out more about whats going on.
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This. Is. AWESOME!!!!!

Aaahhh stop it (but seriously, go on)
In all seriousness, can you tell me what you like about it?
That will help me keep it going well ninja
My favorite thing her her reaction to the fact that she can't go home. (plus "The witch is back!) I have never read anything like this.

Love the art style, its always a plus. She's smart enough not to tell anyone she can teleport until she finds out more about whats going on.

Thank you very much! That is very encouraging.
I can't take credit for the art, but story-wise I will keep trying to produce an interesting story for you biggrin
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The art is quite impressive. I like how you draw her hair and her facial expression and her personality. However, I do have one major constructive criticism to point out, and believe me, take in this point and you will have more readers and fans.

NOTE: I have also made the same mistake in my past project, and it took me almost 250 pages to finally realize this.

From what I can see from the 2 chapters, you have completely fallen in love with your main character, correct? You HAVE to include her in EVERY single page cause IT IS so much fun to draw her. I totally understand that feeling, too.

But coming from me, an experienced-hobbyist-mangaka, you have to move your focal point to other characters in the coming chapters. Do you know why mainstream shonen manga are so popular? that is because the creator introduced at least 3 to 4 loveable characters in the first few chapters, so the reader won't get bored looking at the protagonist all the time.

Hope this helps.

EDIT: you are probably the writer not the artist so this post is aiming at this project, which includes everyone.
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The art is quite impressive. I like how you draw her hair and her facial expression and her personality. However, I do have one major constructive criticism to point out, and believe me, take in this point and you will have more readers and fans.

NOTE: I have also made the same mistake in my past project, and it took me almost 250 pages to finally realize this.

From what I can see from the 2 chapters, you have completely fallen in love with your main character, correct? You HAVE to include her in EVERY single page cause IT IS so much fun to draw her. I totally understand that feeling, too.

But coming from me, an experienced-hobbyist-mangaka, you have to move your focal point to other characters in the coming chapters. Do you know why mainstream shonen manga are so popular? that is because the creator introduced at least 3 to 4 loveable characters in the first few chapters, so the reader won't get bored looking at the protagonist all the time.

Hope this helps.

EDIT: you are probably the writer not the artist so this post is aiming at this project, which includes everyone.

I do take your critique to point. And don't worry, I have a full cast of characters which will begun to be introduced in chapter three. (Note: If the character has a name, you know he's going to appear again)
I considered starting to introduce characters earlier, but I wondered if that would be rushing things as I thought there were some questions needing answers before then.
Please continue to read and let me know if you spot anything else that needs attention.
In the meantime, I've posted a few character sketches of other characters HERE To give you a window to look through
PS, I've updated the manga smile
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manga updated!
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manga updated!
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manga updated!
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Be sure to let me know what you think!
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manga updated!
WHOOOOO!!!!

Be sure to let me know what you think!
Love it!! I cant wait to find out what happens next!!
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manga updated!
WHOOOOO!!!!

Be sure to let me know what you think!
Love it!! I cant wait to find out what happens next!!

Good to hear. I am probably going to have to slow down on the updates. But check in every Saturday, And I will have a handful of pages up smile
I will let you know if I can make them sooner.
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Im putting you on my must watch list
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Im putting you on my must watch list

Really?
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pretty good so far. ^^ there were some issues (very minor) that i noticed, like i wish she would stop saying "mom and dad" and maybe say "parents" on the page where she's wondering if they'll start to worry she's missing.

other than that, there are a few art inconsistencies, but they're pretty much clearing up on their own, so not much of an issue there.

good work and keep going!

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