QueenTroll38
The art is quite impressive. I like how you draw her hair and her facial expression and her personality. However, I do have one major constructive criticism to point out, and believe me, take in this point and you will have more readers and fans.
NOTE: I have also made the same mistake in my past project, and it took me almost 250 pages to finally realize this.
From what I can see from the 2 chapters, you have completely fallen in love with your main character, correct? You HAVE to include her in EVERY single page cause IT IS so much fun to draw her. I totally understand that feeling, too.
But coming from me, an experienced-hobbyist-mangaka, you have to move your focal point to other characters in the coming chapters. Do you know why mainstream shonen manga are so popular? that is because the creator introduced at least 3 to 4 loveable characters in the first few chapters, so the reader won't get bored looking at the protagonist all the time.
Hope this helps.
EDIT: you are probably the writer not the artist so this post is aiming at this project, which includes everyone.
I do take your critique to point. And don't worry, I have a full cast of characters which will begun to be introduced in chapter three. (Note: If the character has a name, you know he's going to appear again)
I considered starting to introduce characters earlier, but I wondered if that would be rushing things as I thought there were some questions needing answers before then.
Please continue to read and let me know if you spot anything else that needs attention.
In the meantime, I've posted a few character sketches of other characters
HERE To give you a window to look through
PS, I've updated the manga
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