Dark-Merchant
Snowblazer
I would like to find a partner or create a group for a story I have created. I am looking for fellow writers as well as an artist or two.
The story is about a young woman with exceptional magic skills. By accident she creates a beating heart of a new world. She decides to bring this heart into a different dimension and help it grow without the influences of her home world. Fearful for her daughters safety, her mother sends two twin brothers to guard her; unable to leave a good adventure alone, her two best friends sneak into her world.
However, the dimension she chooses has an evil spirit who wishes to steal the heart of the world and create its own world of darkness.
Writers: If you are interested please provide an example of dialogue, action, and description.
Artists: If you are interested please provide a link to examples of your choice: portraits, character concepts, comic layouts, action poses, nature and/or city landscapes, animals/insects.
I detect some holes and dues ex machinas but I think with some clever writing it could be quite good. For example, is her home world so corrupt that she's afraid it'll influence (or try to steal) the heart she made, so much so that she's willing to travel to an unknown place to finish it?
is her mother so overprotective of her that the only reason the main character accepted the bodyguards was as a compromise?
how is the inter-dimensional travel made? is it something common in her world - in which case it'll be hard to get rid of the original world's influence - or something rare? in which case you've had the one character (or circle of friends) create or use two revolutionary forms of magic which may be a bit much
how does the evil spirit from the new world know about the heart? I think it'd be easier to write as someone who was from the original world who either overheard or was involved in the making of the heart who wants it for themselves
She takes the Heart to another dimension to raise it as her own. Like our own world, the one she lives in is not perfect. War plagues the lands around the kingdom. She wishes to create a perfect world without any negativity. By the end of the story she realizes that where ever there is good there is bad. She's a little naive...
Her mother worries because she is her only child and like all mothers wants to protect her child from all harm. Due to her over protection her daughter hasn't learned all of life's ups and downs.
In the castle there is a room which leads to the Astral Plains, it is through there that someone can travel to a different Dimension. However, one must have a strong will in order to navigate the harsh terrain.
The evil spirit senses her arrival and see's her plant the Heart into a large rock. Over the course of a few days life sprouts on the rock. He realizes the potential the Heart can have if in the right hands.