Profiles
Gaian name: SteelMullet
Name: SteelMullet, Steel (I don't know...)
Age: 18
Sex: Male
Occupation: Student, office worker( I think. I editted this in, since steel didn't do it right
scream )
The lump that steel posted.Contains personality and bio: Steelmullet's basically the main character. He's the type of guy who gets pissed off easily but forgiving as well. Gerbos is one of Steel's best friends and that's why Gerbos can really get under his skin - because Gerbos knows em so well. Steel is very forgetful, gets excited and loud and is compulsive. He tries to do everything right, but because he over analyzes things, they usually don't turn out as planned. He tries to be careful and considerate. His good side comes out mostly when he's with his friends and has a secret soft side for family/friends. Loves Kitties. Secretly likes every girl...until he meets the "one."
The Word
sad He didn't post this either)
Gaian name:Gerbos
name (if your character has a different name. but i don't see the point, considering we're using our avatars): Gerbos
Age:...Same age as steel...Only...Uhh....Slightly younger.
Sex: Yes please. I mean...dude.Duuuuuuuuuuuh.
Occupation: Office worker...I think.
Personality: He's basically a joker, and doesn't take much seriously. That's not saying he's stupid, though. But he does do stupid stuff. He is immature too. Whenever he does a prank, or something stupid, he usually manages to get Steel into trouble too. He can be very lazy, and has trouble getting any work done. Often he in his spare time he's tinkering with things he shouldn't touch, and he uses the remains in his pranks. He is also a bit of a game freak.Well...Yeah.
Bio (optional): I'm too lazy. And busy.
The word (A quote, or something your character would say often): ....I...Uhh...Can't think of anything.
Gaian name: Summer Dreamer
nicknames include: Summer, Summer D, SD
Age: 18 or whatever is Gerbos' and Steel's ages
Sex: Female
Occupation: Student and later a part-timer at travel agency (this is correct right?)
Personality: She is a sweet, friendly and bubbly girl who can just be described as nice but sometimes naive. She is optimistic and deals with life one day at a time. She likes life to be simple and peaceful.
Bio: A student who has to cope with financial burdens in order to afford to go on the school trip. Her simple life is disrupted with the introduction of Gerbos and Steel when asks the headmaster for job opportunities, and her whole life is full of crazy misadventures after that.
The word: (coming soon I guess...maybe when the story progresses and we write the proper dialogue it'll come naturally.)
Other info: Has a crush on Levelz. She is best friends with Guena
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Gaian name: Dark Dreamer
nicknames include: Dark, DD
Age: Same as the three main, maybe slightly older if need be. Can we get a number for this?! (I'm turning 18 in RL next year so... choose my age)
Sex: Female
Occupation: Student helper in the sick bay
Personality: She likes to keep busy if only to distract herself from life. Once she's set her eye on something, she'll make sure she gets it - one way or another. She likes to dress up as she feels it disguises her true (mostly evil) thoughts.
Bio: A student, she decided to help out at the sick bay so that she would have a place to hide from the multiple idiots she runs into in school. That plus the fact that a lot more goes on in the sick bay then anyone would believe...
The word: Can't think of one now.
Other info: Has feelings for (what was that guy's name again?) Started with "L" or something... I don't see him around anymore. Levelz was it?
Gaian name: Toli Bera
name: Toli
Age: 23 ((SO OLD 0.0))
Sex: quite the dude
Occupation: jack of all trades (Often a fixer/ body guard/ killing you guy.)
Personality: He may seem like a callous quiet jerk that would kill you if it didn't leave such a huge mess on the ground.... but that's just until he's had his coffee. then he becomes the wise and sensible advisor type
Bio (optional): >_> I'll assume this is history... Well He''s been hired by the company to make sure things are taken care of, be it making sure the sink in the bathroom isn't clogged, or making certain that the bill gets paid. (by any means necessary.)
The word: *Sigh of annoyance*
Other Characters
Gaian name: Kiyoshi-Chan
name: Kiyoshi, often just goes by "Kiyo"
Age: 18? (that seems to be the popular age...)
Sex: Female
Occupation: Office Helper
Personality: She's a sarcastic type, and often asks herself the "Why me?" question when she's dragged into interesting situations. She usually has something to say about everything, and its usually sarcastic, not to say that she's nosey. Making up for this, she can be rather fun to be around, loves to tease, and is actually smart and although she doesn't like to admit it, "nice" underneath it all.
Bio (optional): Err, just your normal girl, basically. No huge tragedies in her life to speak of. (and I'm too lazy for this.)
The word (A quote, or something your character would say often): Err.. I'm tired, so I'll add this later.
Plot ideas
The camping episode(heh.Spongbob reference.I couldn't help it >_< wink
Steel,Summer D,Dark D (That sounds...Wierd...) and go camping. We do random activities and things,like Gerbos putting the fire our as a prank or Steel flirting with Summer D(Don't hit me for this!It was the first thing that came to mind!*Hides in a corner*) or gonig skinny dipping or something of the sort.
Then Summer D. and Dark D. have a canoe races,and the loser has to go canoing naked,then the dudes place bets too,Steel rooting for Summer D.,while Gerbos for Dark D..Then apparently Dark D. loses.Or something.I have a poor memory.
Chapter 2(Geez,this is long.It's steel's post from way back when,from the link at the top)
Ok man, and everyone else. This is gonna be long. This is a compilation of all we talked about (on our comic that is). So basically an update on all the story writen so far. Now Geuna is doing chapter one. Otaku1, if you want, while Geuna finishes up the first comic. You can start on the second chapter. Do some rough sketches of the first couple of pages based on what we've writen. Anything else you see fit to squeeze in you can, as long as it follows the writen story. Go nuts man.
Ok, read if you dare!
Start! Oh P.S. This starts after page 3 of our comic, which is already drawn and posted. hehe. ^_^
haha good ideas guys, but keep it simple. member? The original story
involves, me, summer dreamer, and gerbos. Gerbos and I are friends who know
how to piss each other off, and get into trouble. Summer dreamer doesn't
know us very well....at first. But then somehow, we all end up working at
the office.
We have to figure out what those" somehows" are, like say, Gerbos and I have
to work there as punishment. I of course, get lumped in with Gerbos doings
and am blamed for the spray paint as well. Summer D ends up working there
for some other reason. Did we decide that? Then at the end of the first
comic we all end up being friends. Kinda all on the same boat. Of course the
office seems normal at first. But next chapter, it's messed! haha.
That is the story for the first chapter. Those ideas and chacacters are good
Geuna, but maybe we can introduce them in the second chapter. OR even
better, they can work at the office and be the boss and supervisor. haha
that would be funny. Then all those sexual jokes could come in handy. ^_^
Anyways, stick to the story for the first chapter. You still have a lot of
freedom. Like say what summer D does until getting to the office job and why
she's there in the first place. Then next chapter we can go all out!
^_^ Thanks guys!
Steel
haha thanks guys! I'm so happy! haha. Well, we've come pretty far i think.
I hope that it can pick up a little bit to say maybe have like 2 pages done
a week or something. That's what i hope for anyways.
Ok Summer, after page three there by Geuna and maybe the next page, I
believe it's going to go back to your perspective. What would you be doing
in these panels I wonder? After seeing us in detention, maybe you'll be out
the door, but somehow you get stuck with us at the office job. So while
we're getting punished and sent to the office, you get a job there on your
own. I can't remember the reason for you getting a job though, tuition or
was there another reason? hehe
haha Gerbos, you were like the first person to be interested on page one!
haha so nostalgic!
Anyways, i just wanted an update on story, review sort of, so that we can
progress. I need the story talked about to visualize the next parts that
will unfold. hehe. Anyways, laters! ^_^
Steel
Hmm, review eh? Let's see, the initial plan was that they are in the office,
they find out the punishment, Summer D ends up fainting in shock and getting
carried off to the sick bay and we probably would include Gerbos trying to
manipulate the thermometer to be super high temperature and such. And the
three start being great friends!
Your idea is good, I think we can change it a little so that Summer D goes
get the job herself, while the guys find out the punishment themselves. Then
there could be a "Oh, by the way, you'll be working with these guys." scene.
The door would swing open, there would be a great frozen moment of shock,
where they stand and stare at each other, then Gerbos could say something
like "Yo." And it continues on with the sick bay scenes and such.
If Steel is still supposed to be interested in Summer D, then we could
include all kinds of funny scenes, like how he acted towards her in the
snowboard race, haha. Kind of like how Sanji acts around Nami in One Piece.
Or Brock around any girl in Pokemon, lol.
Need more details, just ask! Or anyone feel free to add on ideas to enhance!
Ok, so, Summer D, there is going to be a male character you're attacted to
in the comic initially, like say a crush you had since like 2nd grade or
something funny like that. Now, Steel, I'd say, or Gerbos, i dunno which
one, but prob. Steel, has liked you for like just as long. But the problem
is, they're kinda just friends, and SD doesn't know it. So now...when you
get the office job! Steel at first doesn't want to go there, cuz he thinks
it's just a punishment that Gerbos dragged him into. But once he sees SD
there, things kinda look up...until, SD's long time crush ______(blank)
works there too!!! haha that's they premise for the office job. That's what
i want. What do you guys think?
Since it's SD's long time crush, i was wondering summer, you can pick the
avatar character for your crush if you want to? Any friends on Gaia that
would make a suitable male crush character? Feedback plz. Thanks.
Steel
ok so Summer D, now your crush is Levelz then. Aw now...let's see, I think
after we all get situated into our office job. Say after the first chapter
that sets all the environments down, well start off at the school again.
It's all ready known to the readers that we're all in the office job after
school, so when they see you in the school halls ppl will be like what's she
up to?
And what you're up to is this: hehe. Um this is where we'll introduce
Levelz. And Dark Dreamer. You are following Levelz around. It just shows you
in the panels say being suspicious, looking around corners, saying stuff
like, there he is, and stuff like that. Hiding and spying. The audience is
like, what's she doing. Then when we show what you're looking at, Levelz, it
shows him talking to his friends, and the title of that chapter above his
head. Like, secret crush, or hidden crush, something like that. Now...after
the intro to chapter 2, we'll resume where we left off...you tailing
em...and then prahaps, i can come along and talk to you. Now you don't want
to be distracted and it turns out embarrassing. Cuz say, i'm talking about
how crazy it is we're all in the same job, cuz i like SD and stuff, acting
all kinda bashful, but you're preocupied, and it ends up Levelz seeing
something funny. Say you're trying to escape me, and I'm like hey and i grab
your shoulder right? and you trip and we all kinda fall on each other.
hahah. something that would be embarassing. Anyways, so Levelz is like what?
Sweat bubble, and SD thinks its all over, the end of the world.
Then the scene changes showing SD in class kinda spaced out, we can put
Gerbos in the class with her being funny as usuall. Summer D is then walking
down the hall towards the stairs day dreaming, or kinda like spaced out
thinking...now he hates me, or something like that...then you hear
Gerbos,"WATCH OUT!" haha and summer falls down the stairs. hahahaha.
Next scene, Summer D goes to the Nurses office, with a spained ankle. Dark
dreamer is introduced as the nurse. It's all good, SD is kinda still spaced
out and stuff. DD and SD talk a bit. And there ya have it i'm out of ideas.
hahahaha.
I kinda want Dark Dreamer to have something against SD but i think we'd only
need to hint at it here in this scene. Kinda so the audience is like, what's
that about? Then we cover it far later on.
So that's my brainstorming. Plz imput. This is how i see the next chapter
going. Just like that. Thanks everyone. Laters for now.
Steel
Wow! That was a fantastic brainstorm! You practically thought out the whole
of the second chapter!
Ok, for the hints that Dark Dreamer dislikes SD, maybe Dark Dreamer would be
all nice and sweet in public, but when it comes to the sickbay she has the
evil vibe and evil laugh as she peers down at the unconcious SD. Maybe Dark
Dreamer doesn't like Summer Dreamer cos their names are similar? Or she's
envious of SD? Then there could be scenes of her attempting to poison SD's
medicine, but somehow she'll always fails to do so. The ending scene could
be something like Dark Dreamer bidding farewell and speedy recovery to SD,
then as SD's back is turned, we see Dark Dreamer's face going all dark, with
evil black flame aura around her, and all you can see are her eyes. And SD
would leave wondering to herself, "The air seems so cold all of a sudden.
Hmm...must be a breeze."
Later on, Levelz's character would need developing. What kind of person
would he be? The cool aloof type? Or the charming, generous kind? The kind
who seems solitary in school, but outside school SD sees the nice kind
person he really is? He could be even be the kind who acts all over
dramatic, trying to show off, in front of the girl he likes (Guena or
someone else). I say the girl should be someone else, otherwise I doubt SD
would want to stay friends with Guena, haha, but it's ok if you think Guena
will fit better. Anyway, the further development of Levelz character can be
kept to chapter 3 or something, since I think chapter 2 has plenty enough
going on as it is!
Oh yah, chapter 1 is ending with the sickbay scene after SD faints right?
Don't think we'll hint any of Dark Dreamer's dislike for her in that scene
yet.
Er, anyone PM-ing Levelz?
Hey! I was thinking that either:
-DD could be related to Levelz (sister or cousin most prob) and does not
like SD cos she's overprotective of him?
-DD likes Levelz aka is SD's rival
-DD likes Steel or Gerbos and doesn't like how they're always hanging around
SD
DD only gets evil when she realises that the person sitting in the sickbay
is SD. So that means that SD's secret must get out somehow... Maybe when SD
mentions her name, DD will suddenly freeze midway what's she's doing and get
evil. Later, we can show some memories/thoughts of DD to let the readers in
a little more about why she's so evil to SD.
Anyway Steel, I can't answer your PM cos it's set to friends only so I
requested to add you as a friend. :S
hahah great ideas guys! ^_^ this is so interesting. Um yes, love for DD
would be best. um and assistant nurse, kinda or nurse helper. She could be
older, that would be funny, cuz she will have a thing for younger men, and
maybe she's jealous or SD cuz she's so young and pretty and gets the young
men? I like that idea. Let's keep talkin! haha ^_^
Steel
Oh and guess what? It's my birthday today! hehehe. yaay for me. ^_^
haha yeah, i dunno. He can be still if you want. But...he wouldn't have
that, you know...boyish prep sports type charm that we want SD to love about
em. Although...It would be funny to have SD find out that the boy she likes
is in fact, Levelz, but out of uniform and not a disiplinary master. Then
she'd be like, "whaa!?" haha. But if that doesn't work, then you can always
go pick someone else. ^_^ Chose your destiny. haha.
Ok, so, DD is our age in the comic then. And is a helper. She dislikes SD
cuz she also likes Levelz. That'll set up loads of fun situations. ^_^ Um DD
is a helper nurse. And we can do an inner thing. Not really like Sakura, but
something similar. Ahh..so we have the second chapter finished with SD and
DD at the nurses office, and we hint to the audience, who is just meeting DD
for the first time, that DD has a evil side to her and something against SD.
Then the chapter 2 will end and the new one will start off with DD and give
a little bit about her. Maybe starting off by her ranting and raving in the
nurses office about SD and Levelz.
Anyways, the whole second chapter is complete. Way to go guys! ^_^ Next one!
Let's go! hehe.
Steel
oh yeah, we'll roughly say that we're all the same age. But no, you work
there as like kinda full time. Quite a high player in the office job. ^_^ So
it's different than us. But when Summer D gets there, she ends up doing a
really good job and steals some of your thunder. That makes you kinda have a
thing against her and sets up some awesome office hijinks. ^_^
Ok, for the hints that Dark Dreamer dislikes SD, maybe Dark Dreamer would be
all nice and sweet in public, but when it comes to the sickbay she has the
evil vibe and evil laugh as she peers down at the unconcious SD. Maybe Dark
Dreamer doesn't like Summer Dreamer cos their names are similar? Or she's
envious of SD? Then there could be scenes of her attempting to poison SD's
medicine, but somehow she'll always fails to do so. The ending scene could
be something like Dark Dreamer bidding farewell and speedy recovery to SD,
then as SD's back is turned, we see Dark Dreamer's face going all dark, with
evil black flame aura around her, and all you can see are her eyes. And SD
would leave wondering to herself, "The air seems so cold all of a sudden.
Hmm...must be a breeze."
um you can go right into the next page rough draft if you want. Ahh...We
could skip to Summer D's point of view next since we've shown a bit of Steel
and Gerbos. Mmm, like we can have Gerbos and Steel, walk out of the office,
going like, "I can't believe we have to do THAT." Maybe put your flash back
part there. haha, then pan to summer D, walking to class again. Ah...and
maybe we can introduce the fact in class or somewhere that she's going to
work at an office job for tutition. Maybe she gets called to the schools
office, and SD is all nervous, and the Principal says to her that she hasn't
paid her tutition yet, and that she might have to get kicked out. But since
the principal is a nice person, he/she, gives her the option of taking up an
after school job as payment, or for payment.
If you can work with that idea in mind, you basically have the freedom to
add anything else you want. ^_^
Steel
Does that mean Levelz is going along too? if that's the case, we can just
put it into the storyline as a class trip, so there's a reason for him to be
there (actually, a reason for anyone of us to be there ). I don't mind being
the loser if you all decide it's easier to make it me. Just need some heavy
censoring...
Alternatively, it could be a situation where they made the bet including the
2 guys without asking them first. Eg. Summer D says that if she loses, then
Steel would have to canoe-streak and then DD would say the same thing for
Gerbos. The loser threatens the oblivious guy to do it.
After the whole tour agency is set up, what if a customer challenged them,
asking something along the lines of "How would you know it's fun if you've
never actually been on the tour?" then all of you end up travelling on
impulse. The further you are from home, the deeper into trouble you can get.
You 2 guys could go on a trip, passing it off as a "company expense" as
you're "sampling the products" while Summer D tries to hold the whole place
together... or gets to the airport way before them.
So anyone on completing the camping chapter. We know what's happening in
chapter 3. It's Dark Dreamer and Summer Dreamer face off! haha. Giver nuts
you guys! ^_^ Any whacked out ideas are acceptable! And we may have other
ppl doing the art now, besides Geuna for the spin offs, such as this camping
chapter. So your whacked out ideas might fit someone's drawing style
perfectly. ^_^ hehe. Anyways, tty all later
Toli's entrance
Toli's entrance
It's another day at the job.And it's break,lunch,whatever.This dude is sat down beside a coffee dispenser,drinking coffee.A momeny later,a rugby(I'm british.I don't play american football.'Specially because they're wimps.Why needs padding?) ball comes flying through the window, and smashes into a coffee dispenser.Gerbos runs in,apologises.
But then,the dude's eyes turn red(Well,they should! ) and maybe he reveals himself to be a part time murderer or something?I dunno.I don't know what he does to gerbos either.So that's all i can remember...I'm useless
Ok I feel the urge to fill you in.... Toli is a "care taker" which means Yes he will bludgeon people mercilesssly if he has to. but more often he fixes things (Sometimes not so well)
As for what he does to gerbos I think he wrapped him up in a duct-tape cacoon and hung him by his feet from the roof as he whimpers and holds the broken coffee machine whimpering and saying stuff like: "My baby...."
Kingdom Hearts
Apparently,we're over at steel's house or on the phone,or something like that.And we're playing video games, or something like that(Again).Then,we randomly get sucked into the game or whatever,and take on the roles of the characters,summer D being Kairi, and Gerbos and steel or arguing over why gets to be Sora.I don't know who Geuna or Toli(You should be Donald.You always remind me of ducks,for some reason o_O) are yet.So,anyway,that heartless are mindless/zombified gaians and I can't remember how we get out.Oh dear.
I couldn't think of a title, but if you read it, you wouldn't need it.
*Steel and Gerbos walk into the NAJ Con "Nerds agianst Jocks Convention"**Steels in a scifi outfit*
Gerbos "Why are we here agian?"
Steel "Dude its NAJ!!!!"
Gerbos "Your point?"
Steel "Oh Be quiet. Gerbos lets go to the Hawk Wars stand. Gerbs?"
*Looks around but doesnt see Gerbos*
*A nerd walks into steel and gets mad*
Random Person "Creetin In the words of Hogen Dos I Challenge you!!!"
*Steel gets confused*
Random Person "DIE!!!!"
*Pulls out a light sabre rip*
*Random fighting scene*
*A rock hits the nerd in the head and he falls*
*Steel looks at the shooter and see Gerbos*
Gerbos "These things are fun. Check out this doosy I bought for a lint piece I said was a power crystal"
*Pulls out a slingshot*
Steel "How'd you get good at shooting?"
Gerbos "I practiced"
*Gerbos points to a huge pile of knocked out nerd*
Yet Another Random Thought
Kid Inferno and Gerbos are walking home after school
Kid Inferno: Man Im hungry for some hotdog
Gerbos: You b*****d!!! Do you know what they kill to make hotdogs?!!
Kid Inferno: No, What do they kill
Gerbos: Im not sure.....
*A poodle walks by and both Kid and Gerbos look at each other with a evil grin*
Both:EXPERIMENT TIME!!!
Kid:Ill get the puppy you get the buns
Gerbos pulls out a bag of buns
Gerbos:Got'm
Kid: I dont even wanna know why u have those
Finally another thought
*Setting: After school Summer, Gerbos, and Steel are walking home*
*Summer holding a cell phone, steel playing gameboy, and gerbos listening to an MP3 player and looking at the sky dazed*
Steel "Ever wander if this is all just one big video game?"
Gerbos "What?"
Steel "Yea, like what if this life we live was just part of a game and god is merely a group of kids with nothing better to do than write comics about games for games"
Summer "Ignore him, maybe his thoughts will go away..."
*The panels turn into a side scroller and its the form of a street and everyones pixel lated like in the old FF games.*
Gerbos "Shut up steel"
Summer "What are you listening to Gerbos?"
Gerbos "Some theme song to a show about three kids who have random things happen to them"
Kingdom Hearts Parody
*Gerbos walks into steels back yard and sees steel running from his own shadow*
Gerbos "Whats wrong with you now?"
Steel "HURRY GERBOS FIND SORA!!!! THE HEARTLESS IS BEHIND ME!!!"
Gerbos "Steel calm down thats just your shadow"
Steel "Your right. Thanks Gerbos"
*Steels shadow gos under him and steel falls through it*
*A keyblade appears in gerbos hand*
Gerbos "Oh no. Im not traveling for years with a duck without eating it"
*Gerbos throws the keyblade and picks up a ice cream pop Steel had dropped as he walks away*
Different Comic about what Gerbos dos with the keyblade
*Gerbos sells it in the pawn shop then summons it to sell it again*
*Gerbos uses it to open his door*
*He uses it as a coster*
*a heartless appears while Gerbos is playing Kingdom Hearts*
*The heartless pics up a controler and plays as Riku (Just pretend its 2player)*
*Heartless wins and starts dancing*
*Steel stabs the heartless with the keyblade and walks away*
Some random comic Toli thought up
Pannel 1:
*Steel looking around for something*
Pannel 2:
*Toli comes in with a dirty shovel on his shoulder*
Steel: Toli Have you seen Gerbos?
Pannel 3:
Toli: *Puts the shovel down shrugging* I buried him.
Steel: *Shock* But he wasn't dead... we have dinner plans.
Pannel 4:
Toli: ... Oh... well this trip to the graveyards going to be akward... *Sweatdrop*
Pannel 5:
Gerbos: *Underground surrounded by zombies* Hate him...-so- much.
Friday The Thirteenth
(Setting:Steel, gerbos, tera, toli, zomg, kid are all walking home from school. Gerbos is trying to get tape from around his head.)
Steel: Tera I still cant believe you were able to mask Gerboses entire face before he woke up.
Terram: I cant believe I went through 16 rolls
Gerbos (Angry face. Only the stress marks visable):*muffle Muffle grumble grumble*
Kid:Whats today?
ZOMG:The 13th
Steel: OH CRAP!
Zomg:What?
Kid: I dont know if you noticed but Gerbos is kinda accident prone
Zomg:Meaning?
Tera:On the 13th everythings wacky and his bad luck becomes so screwed up it passes onto anyone around him
Zomg:You cant be serious
(Gerbos trips over a bear trap and gets his leg stuck)
Steel:1 Down
(Kid and Steel get hit by a passing car)
Zomg:OH MY GAWD!! Are they okay?
Tera:Yea luckily Gerbos has high endurance so we dont get hurt to much either
(Terrams hit by a random trashcan)
Crowd:THERES THE LITTLE BASTARDS THAT TOOK ALL MY TAPE
Zomg:SON OF A!!
The Excuse
Kid: Ger, do something useful for a change!
Gerbos: No way! I'm doing homework or something like that!
Kid: That's a lame excuse.
Gerbos: YOU'RE a lame excuse.
Kid stares. He takes the book Gerbos is reading to find that it's a comic (Of the one our characters are in! That'd be cool.)
I couln't think of an ending. It's short, so anyone that doesn't want tyo do a long comic doesn't have an excuse!
Sasuke_Uchiha27
Bleach Parody Comic
*Kid*
Kid Inferno Information
Name: (Hmmm what should his legit name be? Well since its a parody I guess Kid Inferno)
Age: 16
Height: 5'7
Zanpaktoh Name: genkotsu(Fist) chijin(Idiot)
Bankai: Genkotsu turns into golden gauntlets like Armstrongs' from FMA
Personality: Random, constantly wondering off, loves to hit stuff, loves a challenge, easily bored
Fighting style: Enjoys smacking people with his hilt. Dislikes the sight of blood so he tends to just beat things to a pulp.
Martial Art: Wushu, Tai Kwon Do, Muay Thai
*Sasuke*
Sasuke Information
Name:Sasuke Toushiro
Age:16
Height:5'8"
Zampakuto:Hiken(Ice Blade)
Bankai:RetsuKaen(cold blaze)
*the place turns to snow and my soul slayer handel turns into a frozen dragon head and my blade goes white and sharp.
I can freeze people if i stab them and paralize them when i cut them.
Personality:Sarcastic and funny but can be serious at times(mostly in a fight)
Fighting Style:Is a skilled swordsman and has great demon arts skills such as the flash step.
Martial Arts:Ninjutsu,Tae Kwon Do,Karate,jujitsu and Kendo.
*Gerbos* Gerbos in shinigami uniform!
Gerbos Information
Name: Gerbos (Duh...)
Age: 16
Height: 5'8"
Zanpaktoh name: Crassus. It's activated with the command "Vae Victus"
Personality: Well, it's on the front page, so...
Fighting style: Though they don't actually have elements, I have an affinity for metal. Swordsmanship is the speciality.
Matial arts: Kendo, fencing, iaido, aikido, kenjutsu
I want to be a villain in this. I mean, it's no fun if we use a made-up guy as a baddy. Or we could recruit people into this thread (Unlikely) to be the villain. Don't worry, no need to change the story so far. It can be added on when I meet Renji.
(later in series)
KidInferno
Sasuke_Uchiha27
Panel One
A landscape view of our town in the background.
A Hill is close to the camera/viewer w/e.
On the hill is that black outline of the first 3 main characters (Kid, Sasuke, Gerbos)
Panel Two
Kid,Sasuke and Gerbos are running late for class threw the town.
*A close up view with our feet together*
Panel Three
"come on guys" Said Kid
*Shady figure (Kid) hops a mini fence and says the commentary
Gerbos and Sasukes shadowy figures behind*
Panel Four
"im hurrying" Replied Sasuke
*Shady side view of Sasuke with commentary
Gerbos shadowy figure is next to sasuke*
Panel Five
"There up a head,we're here"Said Gerbos.
*Low view as if on the ground in front of gerbos with him running at it
Shady figures again*
Panel Six
*The Shinigami Acadamy Doors open*
*Kid,Sasuke and Gerbos are shown*
Panel Seven
Kid,Sasuke and Gerbos walk in out of breath*
Panel Eight
"your late!"said the Shingiami Teacher
Panel Nine
"Sorry Sensei Shin we were just..." said Gerbos
Panel Ten
"I dont wanna hear it now take a seat!" replied the teacher.
Panel Eleven
Kid takes his seat.
*book on desk*
Panel Twelve
Sasuke Takes his seat.
*book on desk*
Panel Thirteen
Gerbos Takes his seat.
*book on desk*
Panel Fourteen
"Now students tearn to page 90" said the teacher...
*A Few Hours Later*
Panel Fifteen
*two swords colide*
Panel Sixteen
*Kid is thrown back*
Panel Seventeen
*Sasuke is thrown back*
Panel Eighteen
*Gerbos jumps from and tree with his sword in his hands*
Panel Nineteen
*Gerbos comes down threw the air and swings at Kid*
Panel Twenty
*Kid and Gerbos's swords colide*
Panel Twenty-One
*Gerbos is thrown back*
Panel Twenty-Two
*Kid is thrown back*
Panel Twenty-Three
"Okay guys practice is over" Said Sasuke.
Panel Twenty-Four
"What for?" said Kid
Panel Twenty-Five
*Gerbos punches Kid in the head*
Panel Twenty-Six
"owwwwwwww" Said Kid in pain
Panel Twenty-Seven
"I cant believe you forgot today is our graduation were gonna become REAL shinigami!"
Panel Twenty-Eight
*Bell*
"Ring!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
Panel Twenty-Nine
The Graduation has begun lets go!"Said Sasuke
Panel Thirty
*Many Shinigami Students Gathered*
Panel Thirty-One
"Welcome Students to the Shinigami graduation"
Said 1st Squad Captain
Panel Thirty-Two
"After Today You will all be offical Shinigamis I wish luck to all of you"
Said 1st Squad Captain
Panel Thirty-Three
"Now come up here and recieve your uniform and Soul Slayer"
Said 1st Squad Captain
After the graduation....
Panel Thirty-Four
*exasted Sasuke is standing holding his knees bent over*
Panel Thirty-Five
"I will become the 10th Squad Captian no matter what!"
Panel Thirty-Six
*Doors Open*
Panel Thirty-Seven
"Sasuke we have our first mission" Said Kid
Panel Thirty-Eight
"come on!"Said Gerbos
Panel Thirty-Nine
"ok lets go"Said Sasuke
Panel Forty
*Kid,Sasuke and Gerbos are blurs running threw the forest*
Panel Forty-One
*Hollow apears*
Panel Forty-Two
*Kid uses genkotsu(Fist) chijin(Idiot)
Panel Forty-Three
*Sasuke uses Hiken(Ice Blade)
Panel Forty-Four
*Gerbos uses Crassus
Panel Forty-Five
*Sasuke runs at the hollow*
Panel Forty-Six
*Gerbos runs at the hollow*
Panel Forty-Seven
*Kid runs at hollow*
Panel Forty-Eight
*Kid attacks the hollow*
Panel Forty-Nine
*hollow hits Kid back*
Panel Fifty
"Kid!!!" Screamed Gerbos
Panel fifty-one
*the hollows tenticle thingy strikes Gerbos*
Panel fifty-two
*Gerbos stops the attack by shielding himself with his zapakuto*
Panel fifty-three
*Sasuke uses his bankai and attacks*
Panel fifty-four
*The hollow is frozen*
Panel fifty-five
"Now Kid"
Panel fifty-six
*Kids blade turns into golden gauntlets and a golden blasts shoots out*
(okay am i the only writter,also do you think this fight should lead to the hollow dragging us into the real world?)
Idea for steel:
maybe in the real world we make a friend their who is a girl but then soul sociaty kidnaps her and we all get trained by Steel then we all go fight to save her.
Kid "Woohoo guys! Guess what?!"
(Steel, gerbos, and Tera look confused)
Kid "Sasuke is getting a new style! He's gonna be original!"
Gerbos "Yea, just look at the originality" *Pointing*
(Sasuke is dressed exactly like Tera)
Tera "
stare That is so wrong"
Bounty Hunter Arc
KidInferno
Thanks.
Hey you guys im starting real brainstorming and work on a story.
EDIT:
Idea One:
15 Year olds Gerbos and Devin "Kid" are two helpers at a small bounty agency. They both are only given small assignments like paper work, phone calls, shining the weapons, etc. Anyways, one day they get multiple reports of serious bounties in the area. The entire team of professional bounty hunters (Probably only like 7 ppl) head out individually to bring in the culprits. While waiting for the hunters to come back, gerbos reads books on monsters as kid plays video games. All of a sudden another call comes in that there are more criminals in their immediate area......
A little help here? I have a few ways to go with this in my head but not sure which way to take.
-Theres the whole, they prepare to make a name for themselves and take on the bounties themselves.
-The criminals were actually planning to break up the hunters to kill them and put an end to the business in that area to seize the land.
-Theres a secret item/weapon in the shop that they are after
-It turns out the hunters were the bad guys and the kids were just fooled so it turns out they were working for the bad guys all along but no ones really that innocent so their on their own to create a true agency of justice
-Items precious to the kids are stolen so they want them back
-Gerbos and Kids families are killed/captured/the criminals so now their after revenge/answers/honor/a fresh start
-etc.
Throw in ur ideas too
KidInferno
Gerbos
I got an idea from reading the first few sentences.
Right, so we just handle all the paper work and crap. Then one day, we see a job that interests us. We're supposed to deliver it to the guy we're working for so he can do it, but instead because we want to do it ourselves, so we forge a reply to the client, and then go off to do it ourselves without telling boss. And that's how it starts.
Maybe while we're out of town doing the bounty, there's some sort of raid on the village and...I dunno. it seems too typical to have everyone die but us. But it would be easy to make a story from there. Maybe we seek revenge by killing every single bounty we can find. Then the other bounty hunters hate us, so they frame us for a crime, which in turn puts a bounty on our heads. That makes us an enemy of both the bounty hunters and the bounties themselves. Then maybe we descover that both parties are corrupt, with the bounty hunters killing off all the legendary bounty hunters.
That just came off the top of my head. It's also the first plot I've come up with that doesn't include monsters.
Your idea had great timing, Kid, because a couple of hours ago I was playing Oddworld: Stranger's Wrath.
Yea I was thinking about the holding onto a bounty thing but it seemed a bit cliche so I disregarded it. Hmm we could go with it in a multitude of ways.
1) We want to be real bounty hunters so we hold onto a request and go after it ourselves like you said
1a) We arrive at the bounty and during the skirmish, we accidentally kill him when it was a bring back alive mission. So then theres all this heat over it and hes part of a big conspiracy blah blah
1b) Gerbos and Kid take the bounty and all that. But then we screw up and he gets away. So the team your working for fires you and we either go out by ourselves and all that crap or you join another, more rag-tag, team.
1c) The bounty was in fact sent by the suspect and when we arrive he plays a game of cat and mouse which ends with us in a demolished area with many civilians hurt and were being blamed.
1d) MORE IDEAS haha
Gerbos
I got an idea from reading the first few sentences.
Right, so we just handle all the paper work and crap. Then one day, we see a job that interests us. We're supposed to deliver it to the guy we're working for so he can do it, but instead because we want to do it ourselves, so we forge a reply to the client, and then go off to do it ourselves without telling boss. And that's how it starts.
Maybe while we're out of town doing the bounty, there's some sort of raid on the village and...I dunno. it seems too typical to have everyone die but us. But it would be easy to make a story from there. Maybe we seek revenge by killing every single bounty we can find. Then the other bounty hunters hate us, so they frame us for a crime, which in turn puts a bounty on our heads. That makes us an enemy of both the bounty hunters and the bounties themselves. Then maybe we descover that both parties are corrupt, with the bounty hunters killing off all the legendary bounty hunters.
That just came off the top of my head. It's also the first plot I've come up with that doesn't include monsters.
Your idea had great timing, Kid, because a couple of hours ago I was playing Oddworld: Stranger's Wrath.
The Egg Man
I got one, its sorta like Kid's 1b though.
So you guys go to take the bounty and all that. But then you screw up and he gets away. So the team your working for fires you and you guys either go out by yourselves and all that crap or you join another, more rag-tag, team.
And yay I'm a baddy.
KidInferno
I like a lof of the ideas contributed. Especially Gerbos's turn around plots. Ill try to revise it to see what everyone has to say with the modifications.
The world is a fantasy world. All the different Era's are mixed. There are vehicles, swords, guns, saloons, horses, etc
Gerbos (Western Theme) and Kid (More Modern and yet Futured theme) both work under a group of bounty hunters in a small village. One day while handling the paperwork. Kid and Gerbos are flooded with bounty requests. One of which catches Gerbos's eye. The bounty is for a rather unknown criminal who is suspected of (insert crime). Well after some convincing, Kid agrees with Gerbos to handle the bounty themselves. When they reach the bounty, they are cocky and think their holding back the villain when really hes just toying with us. He simply tells us were too weak and knocks us out. When we wake up were in steels house. He fills us in that we were about to be killed when steel came with 2 of the bounty hunters. He was a traveling medic (he drives cool junk too haha). Gerbos's has a crippling gash on his right leg meaning he cant rely on melee anymore and so must take up the gun temporarily. Kid received a blow to the eye that causes him to develop near sightedness meaning he can't shoot well and must focus on up close and personal combat. Both injuries will take a long time to heal. Anyways, we are scolded for going after the bounty ourselves and costing the small agency a lot of (currency) for our medical expenses and finds for allowing us to bounty without qualifying for a liscence. The leader of the bounty hunters put us on temporary leave which inevitably leads to our firing.
The leader was a well respected highly known bounty hunter but was killed only 3 days after our firing. The finger is immediately pointed at us and when we are to be captured and interrogated. The bounty comes back and confronts us but this time when were brought down, we awaken in a unknown land. Now they believed we fled out of guilt causing a bounty to be placed on us. In order to right our names we try to find who killed our leader/mentor and in the process start our own organization. In the entire ordeal, we take bounties while fighting off other hunters after our heads and it all leads to us finding that the bounty hunters kill off the legendary ones to cause more criminals to take rise so they have more work and can make a higher profit.
KidInferno
The Egg Man
Alright, I've got a couple questions and what-not.
So Gerbos is Western and your future?
We're not talkin' old school cow-boy and robot are we?
And should we have the bad guy be so damn powerfull that he can knock us out in one foul swoop?
And the last of it, (and I promise I'll stop being an a** after this) won't having Gerbos being crippled kind of slow thing down and make it harder to write? Maybe have his leg be like torn off or something and he needs a prosthetic leg that he can walk and run a little with, but he can't fight until he gets a new, sturdier, one. (though that sounds a ot like FMA).
Not robot futuristic. Something like
This
And the whole point was for the bad guy not to be over powerful. Hence why the whole battle thing was surposed to drag on before were beaten. Rather than him toying, lets change it to we actually have him on the defensive but he gets lucky and cuts gerbos's leg which causes him to accidently discharge his weapon which causes a accident that injures my eyes.
And Its not that gerbos would be like in a wheel chair. He can still run and move and stuff, just he cant move fast enough for face to face combat
Quote:
It seems very good, but I kinda agree with Kid. Where did all that coem from? Maybe if we don't go through with it, you could still make a comic of your own with it, because I like the idea.
Here is what I thought about the initial plot...My memory is quite hazy.
Right, Kid and I are bounty hunters working for an experienced bounty hunter, where we handle all the paper work and junk. One day, there's a bounty that comes in and we decide to do it.
This is the bit where my memory gets baaaaad. So, I think that the stuffing gets kicked out of Kid and I by the bounty that we choose, but we end up surviving after Steel finds us left for dead. Erm...We then return to learn that someone from another village has gained hold of a piece of tech that is insanely powerful, maybe the bounty that we attempted to get. Yeah, so then because we screwed up badly, with this guy that we let escape actually holding the towns at ransom, we lose our jobs and get kicked from the village or something. We try to make ammends by trying to go after the bounty again, but we ain't allowed to get the bounty until we have a big enough reputation, since people believe that Kid and I will just go and get killed if we try now. So then we carry on hunting bounties, and maybe some are lackies for the boss guy. Then when we eventually have a high enough reputation, it's almost too late, but then we go after him. After we get him, we look in his briefcase, and when Kid asks "What is it?" I reply "...The Future." or whatever it was that Eggman said before.
That was my recollection of the plot in a nutshell. Might I ask whether we're just going to have one massive bounty hunting group, or will the story be shown from the different points of views from the other groups of main characters? I had always imagined that the size of the people in our thread would be a rather impractical number of people in a bounty hunting group, because each share of the money from catching a bounty would be too small for anything.
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Some people have also suggested that we should not have a clear boss guy, instead oft he suggestion I made.
Kidinferno
This was explained earlier when we first were discussing the comic. From what I recall, theres a corrupt underground system amongst the bounty hunters in which when one or more hunters grow famous for being unstoppable and such, secretly, other bounty hunters come and kill them as to cause a counter effect and create even more criminals as to have a constant source of income. Thus when Gerbos and I botch up our bounty, they play a game and frame us, thus putting a bounty on us even though we are already junior hunters on the way to being bounty hunters. So we attempt to maintain taking down bounties while avoiding captivity ourselves
