FIRST PAGE SKETCH. FEEDBACK PLEASE.

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I am trying to make a comic myself for the first time.
I was wondering how it is looking so far? It is pretty rough at the moment, but the layout and stuff... Is it okay?
I know things are awkward with body proportions at the moment too.. please disregard.

[Rabbit_L]

You can spice it up by varying the size of the interacting characters. Because right now, with the characters all in the same size and those uniform boxing panels, it is not very interesting looking.

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Rabbit_L

You can spice it up by varying the size of the interacting characters. Because right now, with the characters all in the same size and those uniform boxing panels, it is not very interesting looking.

Thank you. In my next panels I have things much smaller and more going one. I thought about that after looking at this one. I am still also trying to learn different view points. Having trouble.

[Rabbit_L]

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Rabbit_L

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Thank you very much! This will help give me more ideas for how to arrange the pictures I want.
Very helpful.

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P.s

Is the art semi alright?

[Rabbit_L]

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There are many things you need to work on: the perspective and how nothing just go straight to off panel in the first panel, the seams of their shirts, the characters' shoulder blades (they are too round and narrow) and their head proportion to their torso is unpleasant.

It's not something that you can luckily fix at first coup, but those are the things I'd point out you should watch out for.

Find some tutorials and keep practicing. With more pages and practicing in the right direction you'll definitively improve, so no worries 8D

[Loomis is a good start]

[A Random Cat]

It's kinda already been said. But a rule I always keep in mind when making a comic is that for every page of comic never reuse a figure size or point of view. For example, you've got two characters in 3/4 view, so you don't make a specific 3/4 shot for the rest of the page. This way it forces you to make changes and think outside the box. biggrin I dunno the method always has worked wonders for making my comic making grow.

Oh, and hey Rabbit. I'm totally not stalking you.

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Rabbit_L

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There are many things you need to work on: the perspective and how nothing just go straight to off panel in the first panel, the seams of their shirts, the characters' shoulder blades (they are too round and narrow) and their head proportion to their torso is unpleasant.

It's not something that you can luckily fix at first coup, but those are the things I'd point out you should watch out for.

Find some tutorials and keep practicing. With more pages and practicing in the right direction you'll definitively improve, so no worries 8D

[Loomis is a good start]

Thank you. Anatomy will be the death of me. ;_; Hopefully, the more I draw pages also, the more practice comes from it and it will look nicer and nicer with time. I really want to get my comic idea down.

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A Random Cat

It's kinda already been said. But a rule I always keep in mind when making a comic is that for every page of comic never reuse a figure size or point of view. For example, you've got two characters in 3/4 view, so you don't make a specific 3/4 shot for the rest of the page. This way it forces you to make changes and think outside the box. biggrin I dunno the method always has worked wonders for making my comic making grow.

Oh, and hey Rabbit. I'm totally not stalking you.

Thank you. I will keep in mind to not draw the same perspective on a page. I was not even considering how it would make it look boring and unpleasant. gonk gonk gonk

[Rabbit_L]

A Random Cat

Ohhai-
Kof, I mean
OH HAI BBY.

[Arararagi]

I think your main problems are:
perspective and anatomy.

But honestly, its much better than anything I've ever done...
So kudos! ;D

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Arararagi

I think your main problems are:
perspective and anatomy.

But honestly, its much better than anything I've ever done...
So kudos! ;D

Hahaha. Thank you, I said earlier too, anatomy and perspective will be the death of me. XD!!! But I will definitely keep practicing.