Comic plot: looking for a critique

[utopiansky]

I recently read an article about camp, that it can only be camp if it is genuine or unaware of its camp-iness. So if you are doing a parody of camp, it will come across as something entirely different...?

oh, i found it

"One must distinguish between naïve and deliberate Camp. Pure Camp is always naive. Camp which knows itself to be Camp (camping) is usually less satisfying.

The pure examples of Camp are unintentional; they are dead serious. The Art Nouveau craftsman who makes a lamp with a snake coiled around it is not kidding, nor is he trying to be charming. He is saying, in all earnestness: Voilà! the Orient! Genuine Camp -- for instance, the numbers devised for the Warner Brothers musicals of the early thirties (42nd Street; The Golddiggers of 1933; ... of 1935; ... of 1937; etc.) by Busby Berkeley -- does not mean to be funny. Camping -- say, the plays of Noel Coward -- does. It seems unlikely that much of the traditional opera repertoire could be such satisfying Camp if the melodramatic absurdities of most opera plots had not been taken seriously by their composers. One doesn't need to know the artist's private intentions. The work tells all. (Compare a typical 19th century opera with Samuel Barber's Vanessa, a piece of manufactured, calculated Camp, and the difference is clear.)"

full article

http://interglacial.com/~sburke/pub/prose/Susan_Sontag_-_Notes_on_Camp.html

[Marty Nozz]

Gnarly The Dolphin

I don't think your characters are entirely bad. I think they have some potential, actually. You do have some cliche factors going on for some of them. For example, Milly and Trevor are some I thought were a bit cliche. Though that doesn't mean you have to discard them! You just have to work with them. I am sure you just have the frame for your character but now its time to add on. :3

Its good to have diversity in your group, especially when it comes to saving the world. I think that's why a lot of people are saying there should be an older and experienced man within that group. It makes sense if you think about it. However I was thinking your character Grady would fit that category. I might be wrong. xD

Its also good to create some conflicts between some characters. Its also a good idea to provide a more detailed and more original back story to evoke emotions from the reader.

Its hard trying to be original, I know! I think you just need to go back and work on your plot and spiffy up your characters. I think you should work on that before creating your comic.

I have faith in you. Good luck! n__n

Thanks for the well wishes and the faith. I'm pretty much working on everything you touched on.

I do think a lot of people are assuming that I'm making the characters young due to there being a teenager in the cast and another having been a child genius. Reading back to what I typed last night I see why that is. I wasn't very clear with my description of Milly. She was indeed a child genius, but she's a grown woman now and nearly 30.

[nikkitynikk]

This was funny, Marty. Especially, after the President curled up into a fetal position and wet himself. It has definite comedy potential. lol

[Marty Nozz]

ntm22

This was funny, Marty. Especially, after the President curled up into a fetal position and wet himself. It has definite comedy potential. lol

Thanks. I did briefly consider trying to do this completely straight faced, but the comic potential is just too great.