Mooncat_LI
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- Posted: Sun, 28 Nov 2004 18:25:25 +0000
Okee, here's my idea: beware, it's creepy.
Christopher Revins is 16 years old, and in a mental institute. He has a strange condition with his eyes, where even the dimmest light hurts his eyes.
His friend, an albino mute named Andrew, continuously asks him why he is at the Institute, but Chris continuously refuses to say.
In fact, the only think everyone except Chris knows about the boy is that he keeps hallucinating he sees someone named Daniel in his room. Chris sees Daniel as a normal kid, except for the huge hole in his left eye.
The comic goes on. I introduce his neurotic therapist, Dr. Franks, and Andrew's nurse, Nancy Guida. Daniel make more and more appearances, constantly teasing Chris.
One day, Dr. Franks sits Chris down and asks him for his own view on the 'incident' that landed him in the institute.
The incident is a school shooting, in which Chris, completely crazed and sun-blinded, steals a gun from the security room at his school and shoots everyone, including the girl he liked.
This part, I've got down to the fine details, so I'll give you a sort of script:
Chris looks around, gun in hand, and sees all carnage around him. A realization hits him, and he starts laughing.
Chris: "This is such total bullshit. Bullshit, bullshit, bullshit. I have got to be insane, 'cause I don't think I really wanted to do this."
Chris sits down.
Chris: "There shouldn't be room on Earth for some insane freak. I'll be sent to jail, and I couldn't stand myself with all my friend's blood on my hands."
Chris sits down and drops all the bullets in his gun, except one.
Chris: Presses the gun to his head. "This is probably the best way to go. No one'll need to waste any nightmare on such a shithead."
A quick flash to the present.
Dr. Frank: "Then what, Chris?"
Chris: "Then Danny stopped me."
Dr. Frank: "Danny?"
Daniel, free of hole in his head, runs up.
Daniel: "Chris! What are doing?"
Chris: Looks up. "Oh, hi."
Daniel: "Chris, you can't kill yourself. Look at me. I've known you since the second grade, man. I know you wouldn't do anything like what you've just done. You're sick, Chris, you just gotta except that, and try to get help. Do you understand that, Chris?"
Chris is silent.
Daniel: Annoyed. "Oh, Christopher! You know that girl you liked? Katherine? Yeah, I found her with a bullet through her brain! Even if she survives, she'll be blind. Did you want that? Seriously? Chris, look at me!"
Chris still doesn't look at Daniel.
Daniel: "Listen, put the gun down. I called the police, and-"
Chris: "You what!?"
Dr. Frank: "Is that what got you angry?"
Chris: "Yes."
Chris: "You called the police on me!? You s**t!"
Daniel: "You'd never be able to get this past you, Chris. Someone would've called the police, if not me."
Chris: "You called the police... I can't believe it..."
Daniel: "Chris, you're not listening to me."
Chris: "You s**t. Total s**t!"
Daniel: "Chris, listen to m-"
Chris's hand shoots up and the trigger pulls. The bullet goes through Daniel's left eye. He dies immediately.
Dr. Frank: "That's still no reason to kill someone, Chris."
Chris: "..."
That's not the end, but that's all I'll tell you. The end is too weird.
Christopher Revins is 16 years old, and in a mental institute. He has a strange condition with his eyes, where even the dimmest light hurts his eyes.
His friend, an albino mute named Andrew, continuously asks him why he is at the Institute, but Chris continuously refuses to say.
In fact, the only think everyone except Chris knows about the boy is that he keeps hallucinating he sees someone named Daniel in his room. Chris sees Daniel as a normal kid, except for the huge hole in his left eye.
The comic goes on. I introduce his neurotic therapist, Dr. Franks, and Andrew's nurse, Nancy Guida. Daniel make more and more appearances, constantly teasing Chris.
One day, Dr. Franks sits Chris down and asks him for his own view on the 'incident' that landed him in the institute.
The incident is a school shooting, in which Chris, completely crazed and sun-blinded, steals a gun from the security room at his school and shoots everyone, including the girl he liked.
This part, I've got down to the fine details, so I'll give you a sort of script:
Chris looks around, gun in hand, and sees all carnage around him. A realization hits him, and he starts laughing.
Chris: "This is such total bullshit. Bullshit, bullshit, bullshit. I have got to be insane, 'cause I don't think I really wanted to do this."
Chris sits down.
Chris: "There shouldn't be room on Earth for some insane freak. I'll be sent to jail, and I couldn't stand myself with all my friend's blood on my hands."
Chris sits down and drops all the bullets in his gun, except one.
Chris: Presses the gun to his head. "This is probably the best way to go. No one'll need to waste any nightmare on such a shithead."
A quick flash to the present.
Dr. Frank: "Then what, Chris?"
Chris: "Then Danny stopped me."
Dr. Frank: "Danny?"
Daniel, free of hole in his head, runs up.
Daniel: "Chris! What are doing?"
Chris: Looks up. "Oh, hi."
Daniel: "Chris, you can't kill yourself. Look at me. I've known you since the second grade, man. I know you wouldn't do anything like what you've just done. You're sick, Chris, you just gotta except that, and try to get help. Do you understand that, Chris?"
Chris is silent.
Daniel: Annoyed. "Oh, Christopher! You know that girl you liked? Katherine? Yeah, I found her with a bullet through her brain! Even if she survives, she'll be blind. Did you want that? Seriously? Chris, look at me!"
Chris still doesn't look at Daniel.
Daniel: "Listen, put the gun down. I called the police, and-"
Chris: "You what!?"
Dr. Frank: "Is that what got you angry?"
Chris: "Yes."
Chris: "You called the police on me!? You s**t!"
Daniel: "You'd never be able to get this past you, Chris. Someone would've called the police, if not me."
Chris: "You called the police... I can't believe it..."
Daniel: "Chris, you're not listening to me."
Chris: "You s**t. Total s**t!"
Daniel: "Chris, listen to m-"
Chris's hand shoots up and the trigger pulls. The bullet goes through Daniel's left eye. He dies immediately.
Dr. Frank: "That's still no reason to kill someone, Chris."
Chris: "..."
That's not the end, but that's all I'll tell you. The end is too weird.