kittiko
(?)Community Member
- Posted: Tue, 30 Apr 2013 18:52:45 +0000
Okay guys. I'd first like to say that I've been lurking this forum for a few months now reading up on all the critiques and pointers that get dropped on other people's works.... and while it's been nice, I think I finally have the courage to post my work and get more direct/useful comments for me to use.
While you guys have free range to critique every pixel of my little project, I would like to point out some things that I already know that don't necessarily need to be hammered:
-I need to scan/ink these things better. The lines are terrible.
-Comics need nearly as much black space as there is white. (which I will be working on!)
This is a Pokemon story. Yeah not my own creativity spewing all over the page. It is actually just a side project I'm working on to sharpen my skills for a much bigger, original idea that I have.
So although critique on the story is nice, it is not my main goal here. Sure tell me where pacing is weird, wording, ballooning, ect. But I'm actually looking for pointers on how to improve my drawing. Where is it good, and where is it god awful? Does it look dynamic at all? Those sorts of things.
Enough of me hiding behind an introduction though. Here is my work!
Oh and one last little note:
If you haven't played Pokemon Red/Blue this may be a little bit confusing. The main character is just some NPC that you beat early on while playing the game. Normally when you are defeated in the game you 'black out' and magically awaken at the Pokecenter. So this story revolves around a NPC that blacks out when defeated by the player.
While you guys have free range to critique every pixel of my little project, I would like to point out some things that I already know that don't necessarily need to be hammered:
-I need to scan/ink these things better. The lines are terrible.
-Comics need nearly as much black space as there is white. (which I will be working on!)
This is a Pokemon story. Yeah not my own creativity spewing all over the page. It is actually just a side project I'm working on to sharpen my skills for a much bigger, original idea that I have.
So although critique on the story is nice, it is not my main goal here. Sure tell me where pacing is weird, wording, ballooning, ect. But I'm actually looking for pointers on how to improve my drawing. Where is it good, and where is it god awful? Does it look dynamic at all? Those sorts of things.
Enough of me hiding behind an introduction though. Here is my work!
Oh and one last little note:
If you haven't played Pokemon Red/Blue this may be a little bit confusing. The main character is just some NPC that you beat early on while playing the game. Normally when you are defeated in the game you 'black out' and magically awaken at the Pokecenter. So this story revolves around a NPC that blacks out when defeated by the player.