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DEIZ WRITING PARTY!


Reserved for Westice, BarnOwl6-5, Fluxit Aqua et Sanguine and their various associates.

Writing for the ever-so-pleasing DeIz game, which can be found for download here if you're interested. (And reading this, which you're probably not.)

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EDIT, 23 JULY 2013:

BARNOWL6-5 HAS GOTTEN ART DONE BY NONE OTHER THAN MIKE INEL, THE CREATOR OF DEIZ, FOR HER AWESOME POSTAGE IN THIS THREAD!


THE POST:

BarnOwl6-5
I was so distracted in my thoughts that I didn't notice anything around me, causing me to slam into a person heading in the opposite direction. We fell to the floor, and when I looked up, it was just the person I wanted to see.
"If you were hoping to get in on my next film, you're going to have to wait a bit," Carmine teased, not looking too upset at having been knocked down. This was it. I opened my mouth to say exactly what I thought about her little movie, but nothing came out. "What's the matter? Cat got your tongue? Or was it your friend?" I felt my face grow hot.


THE ARTZ:

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Dudes...WE SHOULD TOTALLY MAKE A DEIZ ROLEPLAY! TOTALLY!!!! blaugh
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Dudes...WE SHOULD TOTALLY MAKE A DEIZ ROLEPLAY! TOTALLY!!!! blaugh


That... sounds... AWESOME cat_eek

I CALL CHARMIE
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Dudes...WE SHOULD TOTALLY MAKE A DEIZ ROLEPLAY! TOTALLY!!!! blaugh


That... sounds... AWESOME cat_eek

I CALL CHARMIE

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THEN CEIL IS MINE, BITCHEZ! (Love you!)
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Out Of Writing: Starting with Iris/Ceil.
May make them not actually get together. What do you think?
Also, I'm going to edit the "memory" scene a tiny bit for a change that I'd like to make. 'CAUSE.

Back In Writing: I stared at our locked hands for several moments. I wasn't sure I understood everything. I tended not to understand everything much of the time, anyway, and this situation was... too confusing.

"A-- Ai?" She looked at me with her big, pomegranate-red eyes, and smiled again. It didn't make sense. How could we not have recognized one another before? I had been friends with this girl for so long... we'd been the best of friends, always watching movies together, or playing at my house... I just didn't see how we could have passed by one another for so long, in plain sight. I felt like I was in one of Iris' films: We caught glimpses of one another, and even established a new sort of faraway friendship before we knew who we used to be to each other....

"That's right," she said, in her whispering voice, and put a hand on my face, leaning up to kiss me.
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This is the day after the "Her" ending.

"She" is strange and wise, so she definitely needs more explaining. Time to put me thinking hat on!


Chapter (insert chapter # here): Her is Who I'm referring to... I think
When I woke up the next morning, I felt strange. There were many things that could've caused this sensation. It might be because I had just woke up and had not eaten since yesterday, therefor I was hungry. It could be because of my night terrors keeping me up again. Or it could be because of the conversation I had with the black-haired girl yesterday about who really loved who, and what was scripted and junk. Yeah, that's it. I'm going with option one.
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Out Of Writing: Starting with Iris/Ceil.
May make them not actually get together. What do you think?
Also, I'm going to edit the "memory" scene a tiny bit for a change that I'd like to make. 'CAUSE.

Back In Writing: I stared at our locked hands for several moments. I wasn't sure I understood everything. I tended not to understand everything much of the time, anyway, and this situation was... too confusing.

"A-- Ai?" She looked at me with her big, pomegranite-red eyes, and smiled again. It didn't make sense. How could we not have recognized one another before? I had been friends with this girl for so long... we'd been the best of friends, always watching movies together, or playing at my house... I just didn't see how we could have passed by one another for so long, in plain sight. I felt like I was in one of Iris' films: We caught glimpses of one another, and even established a new sort of faraway friendship before we knew who we used to be to each other....

"That's right," she said, in her whispering voice, and put a hand on my face, leaning up to kiss me.

Popular customs dictate that you must make them get together.
However, you could have them try and have it be too awkward for them so they just remain friends.
Good start, by the way.
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Popular customs dictate that you must make them get together.
However, you could have them try and have it be too awkward for them so they just remain friends.
Good start, by the way.


Yeah, I suppose. I don't really know; it's hard to say. Especially with this twisty-thang I have in mind.

If someone else decides they want to do a good Iris/Ceil ending after this, that's fine.

Thankies! I like yours, too. Very amusing!
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Chapter: "Heh. It was worth it"

I couldn't look Charmie in the eye. It was just too weird. We were still friends, but I couldn't look him in the eye. It definitely beat the alternative, I suppose, which was being dead. Everything else that had happened to me the day before had been completely wiped from my mind by what had happened. And yet, I still couldn't look my best friend in the eye.
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(I'm starting with Secret Film, AKA...)
Chapter: "Heh. It was worth it"

I couldn't look Charmie in the eye. It was just too weird. We were still friends, but I couldn't look him in the eye. It definitely beat the alternative, I suppose, which was being dead. Everything else that had happened to me the day before had been completely wiped from my mind by what had happened. And yet, I still couldn't look my best friend in the eye.


Whoop! Man/man AND awkward goodness! heart
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(I'm starting with Secret Film, AKA...)
Chapter: "Heh. It was worth it"

I couldn't look Charmie in the eye. It was just too weird. We were still friends, but I couldn't look him in the eye. It definitely beat the alternative, I suppose, which was being dead. Everything else that had happened to me the day before had been completely wiped from my mind by what had happened. And yet, I still couldn't look my best friend in the eye.

Good start! I love the chapter title (I should give my chapter a better title.)
The only thing I would do is reword it so you use the same phrase three times.
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(I'm starting with Secret Film, AKA...)
Chapter: "Heh. It was worth it"

I couldn't look Charmie in the eye. It was just too weird. We were still friends, but I couldn't look him in the eye. It definitely beat the alternative, I suppose, which was being dead. Everything else that had happened to me the day before had been completely wiped from my mind by what had happened. And yet, I still couldn't look my best friend in the eye.

Good start! I love the chapter title (I should give my chapter a better title.)
The only thing I would do is reword it so you use the same phrase three times.


I actually think it works, with the same phrase, just because it shows his obsessive nervousness about dealing with Charmie now.

I should have a title, too.... But I'm terrible at those....
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Oow: Iris/Ceil: Part II

Biw: I stopped her, though.

It didn’t make sense to me. She… wasn’t the girl I knew….

“You can’t be my Ai,” I mumbled, stepping away from her, and looking at my brightly-polished school-issued shoes. “She was… brown-haired… and with lavender eyes… you don’t even look like her! How could you be her?”

“Silly—" She began, but I cut her off.

“How can you be? Anyone can make up a sappy story about… about two teenagers in love, and their tragic parting. Shakespeare did it hundreds of years ago. You could just be making it up.” I didn’t see why she would, really—she never seemed interested in me, or even knew me until today—but I could see no other reason why this girl, who had so little resemblance to my old friend, would decide to pretend to be her like this.“And don’t call me ‘Silly’. The name’s not yours to call me.”

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